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Nowadays we communicate less with our family members face to face. What are the causes of this? What are some potential solutions?

Nowadays we communicate less with our family members face to face. What are the causes of this? What are some potential solutions? bEWM6
In recent time, people have become so busy with their respective lives that they don’t get time to meet and greet their near and dear ones on a regular basis. In this essay, we will discuss about how the technology has influenced the way we interact with our loved ones. And suggests some ways to overcome this problem. In the ever-evolving technology people have became lazy and creative at the same time. Humans became greedy, everyone is running in a rat race where each person wants to achieve something big. The youngsters find it more amusing to play games in their phone rather that go outside and play in the park. 90% of the people are hooked on social media for entertainment. For example – Applications like tiktok, facebook is trending at every house. Siblings and cousins don’t play boardgames rather they play Clash of cans on their phones. People became more busy in their life due to work pressure, every one wants to be successful and earn some good handsome amount of money, which led to working overtime overlooking their own health and mental peace. When someone is mentally stressed they try to avoid human contacts and its easier to interact over phone than in person. However, if we can minimize the use of phones and internets for youngster’s half of the human population will be interacting again in-person. Schools should ban the use of phones, then the students will interact between themselves. Government should regularize 6hours office timings, and no work pressure. People need to maintain a health lifestyle at there workplace. Office should be wifi free for 1hours when peers should communicate with each other. In conclusion, I believe in modern days people don’t have time to interact with each other due to work pressure and technology. Everyone is trying to win the rat race and in trying to do so people are not living there life in present. We need to be technology free for few hours everyday and connect with our loved ones.
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loved
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ways to overcome this problem.

In the ever-evolving
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technology
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people
have
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became
lazy and creative at the same
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. Humans became greedy, everyone is running in a rat race where each person wants to achieve something
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big
. The youngsters find it more amusing to
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play
games in their
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phone
rather
that go outside and
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play
in the park. 90% of the
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people
are hooked
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facebook
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became more busy in their life due to work pressure, every one wants to be successful and earn
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some
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good
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health and mental peace. When someone is mentally
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stressed
they try to avoid human contacts and its easier to
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over
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than in person.

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internets
for youngster’s half of the human population will be interacting again in-person. Schools should ban the
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Government
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free for 1hours when peers should communicate with each other.

In conclusion
, I believe in modern days
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people
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interact
with each other due to work pressure and
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technology
. Everyone is trying to win the rat race and in trying to do
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so
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people
are not living there life in present. We need to be
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free for few hours
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everyday
and connect with our
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loved
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ones
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays we communicate less with our family members face to face. What are the causes of this? What are some potential solutions?

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