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Nowadays, we are living in a throw-away society. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue? v.1

Nowadays, we are living in a throw-away society. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue? v. 1
It is true that the modern society is characterized by the high volume of waste production stemming from our ordinary life habits. The people's throw-away culture is being cultivated by the producers of the retail goods searching for high profits; this contributes to our planet's pollution and increases excessive utilization of natural resources. In order to tackle this problem, governments should not only implement financial measures, but also try to change the people's waste habits. While the mass-producers' avarice for profit makes the retail goods cheaper for the customers, it also produces excessive waste materials to rap those goods nicely for the attention of buyers. Levying higher taxes on the packaging materials may well reduce both their production and consumption. For example, the abandoning of the free plastic materials in the European Union led to a considerable reduction in the plastic waste there. In addition to this, imposition of the new taxes on the junk-food products, which are also wasted significantly because of their low cost, would provide further remedies to the problem. Therefore, the authorities should come up with a comprehensive plan of financial measures aimed at more elaborate agenda for the reduction of waste, including both the wrapping materials and the consumer goods themselves. While any fiscal measures are very important, one cannot underestimate the importance of educating people to alter their waste-producing habits. Firstly, governments should legally reduce advertising of the processed food in the media. For instance, acknowledging that these goods bear health problems will substantiate legal ban for their excessive marketing. Secondly, increasing national awareness campaigns to fight waste and pollution, should also lessen the waste. Thus, promoting general waste-free culture among the ordinary people could be another way to address the issue. In conclusion, the waste-producing behaviour dangerously affects our planet and the peoples' lives. Although, we might not feel the high degree of importance of the issue now, we will certainly apprehend it tomorrow if we do not alter this habit. Therefore, measures to restrain the producers from the massive production of both the junk food and the unnecessary rap up materials could solve the problem in the near future.
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is characterized
by the high volume of
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waste
production stemming from our ordinary life habits. The
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people
's throw-away culture is
being cultivated
by the producers of the retail
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goods
searching for high profits; this contributes to our planet's pollution and increases excessive utilization of natural resources. In order to tackle this
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problem
,
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governments
should not
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only
implement financial
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measures
,
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but
also
try to
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change
the
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people
's
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waste
habits.

While the mass-producers' avarice for profit
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makes
the retail
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goods
cheaper for the customers, it
also
produces excessive
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waste
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materials
to rap those
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goods
nicely
for the attention of buyers. Levying higher taxes on the packaging
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materials
may well
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reduce
both their production and consumption.
For example
, the abandoning of the free plastic
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materials
in the European Union led to a considerable reduction in the plastic
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waste
there.
In addition
to this, imposition of the new taxes on the junk-food products, which are
also
wasted
significantly
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because
of their low cost, would provide
further
remedies to the
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problem
.
Therefore
, the authorities should
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come
up with a comprehensive plan of financial
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measures
aimed at more elaborate agenda for the reduction of
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waste
, including both the wrapping
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materials
and the consumer
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goods
themselves.

While any fiscal
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measures
are
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very
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important
, one cannot underestimate the importance of educating
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people
to alter their waste-producing habits.
Firstly
,
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governments
should
legally
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reduce
advertising of the processed food in the media.
For instance
, acknowledging that these
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goods
bear health
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problems
will substantiate legal ban for their excessive marketing.
Secondly
, increasing national awareness campaigns to fight
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waste
and pollution, should
also
lessen the
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waste
.
Thus
, promoting general waste-free culture among the ordinary
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people
could be another way to address the issue.

In conclusion
, the waste-producing
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behaviour
dangerously
affects our planet and the peoples'
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lives
. Although, we might not feel the high degree of importance of the issue
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now
, we will
certainly
apprehend it tomorrow if we do not alter this habit.
Therefore
,
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measures
to restrain the producers from the massive production of both the junk food and the unnecessary rap up
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materials
could solve the
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problem
in the near future.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, we are living in a throw-away society. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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