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These day people in some country are living in a "throw-away" society which mean people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue? v.1

These day people in some country are living in a "throw-away" society which mean people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue? v. 1
Society is one of the most important aspect of a healthy and peaceful life which is getting degraded with this growing world. Some people believe that new developments can only be incorporated in the society by the governments and that individuals cannot give any contribution towards the change. In my opinion individuals play a vital role in the change of society and this essay will discuss what can an individual do for the change. There are many government organizations and institutes who contributes a lot of new innovations and developments which help to bring positive change in the society. For instance, Green Peace organization is one of the best NGO in India who supports underprivileged children to complete their education and get a well paying job. This initiative is one the best change that can be brought to our society as this will help lower the poverty rate of our nation. Even though these institutions support the individuals, it is the sole responsibility of the person to use this opportunity for the betterment of his own and of his society. Change in society can be brought through various method. Even a small gesture towards a positive and peaceful life is considered as a change. Individuals can incorporate small changes in their daily routines, which will then sum up to be a big change. For instance, they are many parts of the world suffering through natural calamities. In such cases, individuals can contribute food or money to these people and help them to cope up with their damages. People can also volunteer to teach children in schools and to teach various activities through which illiterate people can earn money. In conclusion, I believe individuals play a very important role in bringing change to the society.
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aspect of a healthy and peaceful life which is getting degraded with this growing world.
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Some
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people
believe that new developments can
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society
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governments
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individuals
cannot give any contribution towards the
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change
. In my opinion
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individuals
play a vital role in the
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change
of
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society
and this essay will discuss what can an
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individual
do for the
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change
.

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government
organizations and institutes who
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contributes
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a lot of
new innovations and developments which
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help
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positive
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change
in the
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.
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, Green Peace organization is one of the best NGO in India who supports underprivileged children to complete their education and
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get
a well paying job. This initiative is
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change
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as this will
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help
lower the poverty rate of our nation.
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these institutions support the
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individuals
, it is the sole responsibility of the person to
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use
this opportunity for the betterment of his
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can
be brought
through various method. Even a
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small
gesture towards a
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positive
and peaceful life
is considered
as a
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change
.
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Individuals
can incorporate
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small
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changes
in their daily routines, which will then sum up to be a
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big
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change
.
For instance
, they are
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many
parts of the world suffering through natural calamities. In such cases,
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individuals
can contribute food or money to these
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people
and
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help
them to cope up with their damages.
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People
can
also
volunteer to teach children in schools and to teach various activities through which illiterate
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people
can earn money.

In conclusion
, I believe
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individuals
play a
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very
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important
role in bringing
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change
to the
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society
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay These day people in some country are living in a "throw-away" society which mean people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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