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Nowadays TV has become an essential part of life. Medium to spread news & awareness and for some, it acts as a companion. What is your opinion about this? v.2

Nowadays TV has become an essential part of life. Medium to spread news & awareness and for some, it acts as a companion. What is your opinion about this? v. 2
In the present, technology is a critical part of a developing country. Furthermore, it represents a number of faculty development. Therefore, it clearly has advantages and disadvantages. Nowadays, technology was basically taught by every school. Surprisingly, lots of companies introduce amazing and smart technology in the world with creative system. Simply, people love to have that technology as a part of their life. Beneficially, there are kinds of benefits present in medical faculty such as unfortunately in the past society can not recognize the what was the cancer moreover what was cause to spread all over the body as a result of a number of humans diagnose the cancer in addition it caused to die. As time went pass human technologically introduces a new machine to scan a body. It's certainly valuable for doctors to identify a symptom of cancer resulting from it save people life who had serious cancers. That became a huge achievement in medical field. On the other hand, unfortunately new technology makes disadvantages. For example; number of students addicted to use a computer with sitting six or seven hours and also they're not considerate about their studies and food. According to that slowly it makes student kind of robot since technology. Apparently, technology makes people lazy and people not use a time to make any decision obviously made by technology. Further, human lose their senses about life and friendly manner. In conclusion, machinery makes more advantages than disadvantages. Additionally, my opinion is the new automation actually makes easy for people day to day activity.
In the present,
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technology
is a critical part of a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developing country
.
Furthermore
, it represents a number of faculty development.
Therefore
, it
clearly
has advantages and disadvantages. Nowadays,
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technology
was
basically
taught by every school.

Surprisingly
, lots of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
introduce amazing and smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
in the world with creative system.
Simply
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to have that
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technology
as a part of their life.

Beneficially
, there are kinds of benefits present in medical faculty such as unfortunately in the past society can not recognize the what was the
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cancer
moreover
what was cause to spread all over the body
as a result
of a number of humans diagnose the
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cancer
in addition
it caused to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
die
.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
time went pass human
technologically
introduces a new machine to scan a body. It's
certainly
valuable for doctors to identify a symptom of
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cancer
resulting from it save
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people
life who had serious
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cancers
. That became a huge achievement in medical field.

On the other hand
, unfortunately new
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technology
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makes
disadvantages.
For example
; number of students addicted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
a computer with sitting six or seven hours and
also
they're not considerate about their studies and food. According to that
slowly
it
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makes
student kind of robot since
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
.
Apparently
,
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technology
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
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people
lazy and
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people
not
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use
a time to
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make
any decision
obviously
made by
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technology
.
Further
, human lose their senses about life and friendly manner.

In conclusion
, machinery
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
more advantages than disadvantages.
Additionally
, my opinion is the new automation actually
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
easy for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
day to day activity.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays TV has become an essential part of life. Medium to spread news & awareness and for some, it acts as a companion. What is your opinion about this? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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