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Nowadays the population of the world is increasing rapidly. New homes and accommodation should be built for this additional population. Some believe that more houses should be constructed in existing towns and cities. Other believe that creating entirely v.2

Nowadays the population of the world is increasing rapidly. New homes and accommodation should be built for this additional population. Some believe that more houses should be constructed in existing towns and cities. Other believe that creating entirely v. 2
Looking into the recent figures declared by world census, increase in the population and hence, their dwelling requirements are asking thought to the issue. Many adepts are in favor of adding the accommodation in existing city area while others support the city expansion towards the countryside. My inclinations accord the later statement in the interest of nature and human being collectively. If we see the existing situation in the most of the metro cities in different countries, they are already highly populated. Constructing additional buildings will not only dense the city area but also affect many other aspects of human life. Firstly, there can be a lack of resources like land, water, etc. which can increase the cost of living in the cities. For instance, Mumbai is the highly congested city of India where the cost of land and other sustenances have touched the sky. Secondly, more developments in left vacant places can reduce the open premises that can cause traffic congestion on roads and streets at a cost of aesthetic beauty of locations. At last, the environment of the cities is also getting polluted due to the increase in population and their activities. More the houses will turn the more pollution in cities. On the other hand, expansion towards the countryside can enforce government to develop more facilities like transportation, water supplies, entertainment and so on. Hence, the living standards of villagers can also be improved through the developments. Moreover, the environment of the countryside is clean and quiet which is beneficial for the personal and social health. Finally, spreading towards the undeveloped area can have economic prosperity for the country. Business and residentials can hire more cheap resources like land, labor, etc. in a rural area which in return will create more jobs for villagers apart from traditional occupations for the personal and economic growth of villages. To conclude, it is rightly said anything in excessive is dangerous. So rather overcrowding the cities, moving towards the countryside will be the best option for overall development.
Looking into the recent figures declared by world census, increase in the population and
hence
, their dwelling requirements are asking
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thought
to the issue.
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Many
adepts are in favor of adding the accommodation in existing city
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area
while others support the city expansion towards the
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countryside
. My inclinations accord the later statement in the interest of nature and human being
collectively
.

If we
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see
the existing situation in the most of the metro
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cities
in
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different
countries, they are already
highly
populated. Constructing additional buildings will not
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only
dense the city
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area
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but
also
affect
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many
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other
aspects of human life.
Firstly
, there can be a lack of resources like land, water, etc. which can increase the cost of living in the
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cities
.
For instance
, Mumbai is the
highly
congested city of India where the cost of land and
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other
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sustenances
have touched the sky.
Secondly
, more developments in
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left
vacant places can
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reduce
the open premises that can cause traffic congestion on roads and streets at a cost of aesthetic beauty of locations. At last, the environment of the
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cities
is
also
getting polluted due to the increase in population and their activities. More the
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houses
will turn the more pollution in cities.

On the
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other
hand, expansion towards the
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countryside
can enforce
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government
to develop more facilities like transportation, water supplies, entertainment and
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so
on.
Hence
, the living standards of villagers can
also
be
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improved
through the developments.
Moreover
, the environment of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countryside
is clean and quiet which is beneficial for the personal and social health.
Finally
, spreading towards the undeveloped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
can have economic prosperity for the country. Business and
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residentials can
hire more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
resources like land, labor, etc. in a rural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
which in return will create more jobs for villagers apart from traditional occupations for the personal and economic growth of villages.

To conclude
, it is
rightly
said anything in excessive is
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dangerous
.
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So
rather
overcrowding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
, moving towards the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countryside
will be the best option for
overall
development.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays the population of the world is increasing rapidly. New homes and accommodation should be built for this additional population. Some believe that more houses should be constructed in existing towns and cities. Other believe that creating entirely v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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