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Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more houses. Should these new homes be constructed in existing cities or should new towns be built in the countryside. What is your opinion? v.2

Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more houses. Should these new homes be constructed in existing cities or should new towns be built in the countryside. What is your opinion? v. 2
More likely than not, countries are facing population growth, leading to require housing facilities to accommodate people. It is a highly discussed issue about whether new development should undergo in existing metropolis or the countryside. In my opinion, new housing development should not undergo at the outskirts of the cities as such constructions would be futuristic and cost-effective. The cogent reason for developing homes in the country-side is that it provides more open space for its residents. Since places which are away from downtown is quite less crowded, it can offer more space for people when they choose to live there. For example, my aunt who lives in a newly built society where she can do daily evening walks as there are many more parks and walking tracks are available as opposed to an ordinary congestive society in downtown. Therefore, if people want to have much more open space around their homes, then country-side development is essential. Furthermore, another key factor is that it is futuristic as well. This means builders or government can easily build more homes in the coming years based on the requirement since they already have more open space. For example, the township where I am living is rapidly expanding by creating many houses on open land every year. Thus, because the population surge is inevitable, authorities should choose open land where further urbanization is possible. To conclude, there is no denying that the population is upsurge without any control amongst in most countries, it hence calls for several houses. This essay explained how building new homes outside the cities are economic and forward-looking as well. I believe that new houses built in the countryside are more livable and affordable to buy.
More likely than not, countries are facing population growth, leading to require housing facilities to accommodate
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people
. It is a
highly
discussed issue about whether
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new
development should undergo in existing metropolis or the
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countryside
. In my opinion,
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new
housing development should not undergo at the outskirts of the cities as such constructions would be futuristic and cost-effective.

The cogent reason for developing
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homes
in the country-side is that it provides more
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open
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space
for its residents. Since places which are away from downtown is quite less crowded, it can offer more
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space
for
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people
when they choose to
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live
there.
For example
, my aunt who
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lives
in a
newly
built society where she can do daily evening walks as there are
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many
more parks and walking
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tracks
are available as opposed to an ordinary congestive society in downtown.
Therefore
, if
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people
want to have much more
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open
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space
around their
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homes
, then country-side development is essential.

Furthermore
, another key factor is that it is futuristic
as well
. This means builders or
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government
can
easily
build more
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homes
in the coming years based on the requirement since they already have more
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open
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space
.
For example
, the township where I am living is
rapidly
expanding by creating
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many
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houses
on
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open
land every year.
Thus
,
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because
the population surge is inevitable, authorities should choose
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open
land where
further
urbanization is possible.

To conclude
, there is no denying that the population is upsurge without any control amongst in most countries, it
hence
calls for several
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houses
. This essay
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explained
how building
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new
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homes
outside the cities are economic and forward-looking
as well
. I believe that
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new
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houses
built in the
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countryside
are more livable and affordable to
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buy
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more houses. Should these new homes be constructed in existing cities or should new towns be built in the countryside. What is your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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