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Nowadays the number of shopping malls are increasing. Because they can include both shopping and entertainment. Majority of individuals believe that in the future the main reason for going to shopping malls will be entertainment not shopping. Hovewer, my point of view is that shopping does not die.

Nowadays the number of shopping malls are increasing. Because they can include both shopping and entertainment. Majority of individuals believe that in the future the main reason for going to shopping malls will be entertainment not shopping. Hovewer, my point of view is that shopping does not die. nNo2e
Firstly, now everywhere even in small towns also are being modernized and being built shopping malla. So many peoplewant to have fun and go there. If they go there they will certainly purchase something for themselves. Secondly, you can go there any time you want. Because it is a closed space. As the result of this there is always cool in summer and warm in winter. It gives you comfort for enjoying and buying goods. Finally, we live in Uzbekistan and according to our tradition almost all family have many children and we love them very much. Most parents do not want to walk their children in hot or cold wheather outside. So they prefer shopping mall. By doing that they manage two things both shopping and entertainment. They may buy freely while their kids are playing in the playground. In conclusion, there will always be a place for shops in each shopping mall in the future. It looses it's meaning without shops.
Firstly
,
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now
everywhere even in
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small
towns
also
are
being modernized
and
being built
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shopping
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malla
.
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So
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many
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peoplewant
to have fun and go there. If they go there they will
certainly
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purchase
something for themselves.
Secondly
, you can go there any time you want.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
it is a closed space. As the result of this there is always cool in summer and warm in winter. It gives you comfort for enjoying and buying
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goods
.
Finally
, we
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live
in Uzbekistan and according to our tradition almost all family have
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many
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
children and
we
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love
them
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very
much. Most parents do not want to walk their children in hot or
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cold
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wheather
outside.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
they prefer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
mall. By doing that they manage two things both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
and entertainment. They may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
freely
while their kids are playing in the playground.
In conclusion
, there will always be a place for shops in each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
mall in the future. It looses it'
The verb 'meaning' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
s meaning
without shops.
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IELTS essay Nowadays the number of shopping malls are increasing. Because they can include both shopping and entertainment. Majority of individuals believe that in the future the main reason for going to shopping malls will be entertainment not shopping. Hovewer, my point of view is that shopping does not die.

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