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Nowadays the number of shopping malls are increasing. Because they can include both shopping and entertainment. Majority of individuals believe that in the future the main reason for going to shopping malls will be entertainment not shopping. Hovewer, my point of view is that shopping does not die.

Nowadays the number of shopping malls are increasing. Because they can include both shopping and entertainment. Majority of individuals believe that in the future the main reason for going to shopping malls will be entertainment not shopping. Hovewer, my point of view is that shopping does not die. nNo2e

Firstly, now everywhere even in small towns also are being modernized and being built shopping malla. So many peoplewant to have fun and go there. If they go there they will certainly purchase something for themselves. Secondly, you can go there any time you want. Because it is a closed space. As the result of this there is always cool in summer and warm in winter. It gives you comfort for enjoying and buying goods. Finally, we live in Uzbekistan and according to our tradition almost all family have many children and we love them very much. Most parents do not want to walk their children in hot or cold wheather outside. So they prefer shopping mall. By doing that they manage two things both shopping and entertainment. They may buy freely while their kids are playing in the playground. In conclusion, there will always be a place for shops in each shopping mall in the future. It looses it's meaning without shops.

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now
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small
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 are being modernized
 and being built
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
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many
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 to have fun and go there. If they go there they will certainly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 something for themselves. Secondly
, you can go there any time you want. “Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
 it is a closed space. As the result of this there is always cool in summer and warm in winter. It gives you comfort for enjoying and buying This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
. Finally
, we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in Uzbekistan and according to our tradition almost all family have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
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children and
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love
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very
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cold
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wheather
 outside. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 they prefer You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
 mall. By doing that they manage two things both You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
 and entertainment. They may This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
freely
 while their kids are playing in the playground. In conclusion
, there will always be a place for shops in each You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
 mall in the future. It looses it'The verb 'meaning' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
s meaning
 without shops. 