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Nowadays the crime rate among young people is increasing. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done by parents and teachers to reduce it?

Nowadays the crime rate among young people is increasing. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done by parents and teachers to reduce it? xmgqN
Nowadays increasing of the crime among young people is dangerous for families and country. There are several causes and solutions to this issue we can take. Possibly the major factor is the improveing of the crime TV shows and movies distribution. This kind of movies and TV programs are changeing peoples psychology to the bad side. A plethora of crime movies creates subconscious effects in people to the bad side. Secondly reason is that these days family communication has changed, and parents are waseting their time to work, and they do not have time to spend with their children. Lack of time in the family leads to misunderstandings. For instance, researches carried out that in USA subconcious effects in people increases killing occasions. Turning to the possible solution, an obvious step to reduce this kind of occasions parents would not spend all their time to their carrier for eraning more money, they would spend a plethora of time with their children. As a result, children have more time to meditate their dreams for the future with help parents advicess. Another important way is counseling for children, which really helps to get rid of the wrong influence and helps to feel positive emotions. As a result, children live their life with plesure and happy. In conclusion, improveing of the crime movies and parents waseting their time to their work seem to be the main causes; however, there are some remedies, parents spending time with their children and counseling for children appearing to be the wisest ones to take if we are to cure
Nowadays increasing of the
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crime
among young
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people
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is
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for families and country. There are several causes and solutions to this issue we can take.

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the major factor is the
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improveing
of the
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crime
TV
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shows
and
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movies
distribution. This kind of
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movies
and TV programs are
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changeing
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peoples
psychology to the
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bad
side. A plethora of
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crime
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movies
creates subconscious effects in
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people
to the
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bad
side.
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reason is that these
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days
family communication has
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changed
, and
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parents
are
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waseting
their
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time
to work, and they do not have
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time
to spend with their
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children
. Lack of
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time
in the family leads to misunderstandings.
For instance
, researches carried out that
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in USA
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subconcious
effects in
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people
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increases
killing occasions.

Turning to the possible solution, an obvious step to
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reduce
this kind of occasions
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parents
would not spend all their
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time
to their carrier for
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eraning
more money, they would spend a plethora of
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time
with their
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children
.
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,
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children
have more
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time
to meditate their dreams for the future with
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help
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parents
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advicess
. Another
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way is counseling for
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influence and
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to feel
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emotions.
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children
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live
their life with
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plesure
and happy.

In conclusion
,
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improveing
of the
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crime
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movies
and
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parents
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waseting
their
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time
to their work seem to be the main causes;
however
, there are
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remedies,
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parents
spending
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time
with their
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children
and counseling for
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children
appearing to be the wisest ones to take if we are to cure
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IELTS essay Nowadays the crime rate among young people is increasing. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done by parents and teachers to reduce it?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
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