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Some people prefer to directly help or support people who need it in the local community, however, others prefer to give money to national or international charities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, some people like to give help to the local community or provide people with direct help. Other people prefer to give money to national and international organizations. v. 2
A helping hand is one of the best things one can offer to someone in need. Giving money to an individual in your local community or to a national or international charity is questioned by many who wants to support someone. Let us talk about this question. People are often told to support the locals in need than to support outsiders as locals are the people you see and meet every day. We share a good bond with our neighbours, the people we meet daily at our work, sweeper and many more. We should always look after people around us if they ever call up or seek for help, this would in return benefit us as the bond you share with them will grow and you are helping in the development of your own community. Whereas, some would suggest in investing your money in some charities which is also a good way of providing help to the ones in need. Charities or NGOs provides a shelter to all the groups around the nation and world who are in need of support and aid. So these charities becomes a good source for anyone who is interested in assisting someone problems around the global circle. After helping the locals around your surrounding you can also donate your money to a charity based hospital or to any trusted organisation helping other. In my opinion helping locals around you or a national or international charity does not matter as your money is invested in some good cause and you are helping someone in need. Everyone should always try their best to help any human being or any animal in need whether it be at a huge scale or at a small scale.
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local
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charity
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support
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support
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locals
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need
than to
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support
outsiders as
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locals
are the
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people
you
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meet
every day. We share a
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good
bond with our
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neighbours
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people
we
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meet
daily at our work, sweeper and
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many
more. We should always look after
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people
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us if they ever call up or seek for
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help
, this would in return benefit us as the bond you share with them will grow and you are helping in the development of your
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own
community.

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would suggest in investing your
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charities
which is
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good
way of providing
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to the ones in
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need
.
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or NGOs provides a shelter to all the groups
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around
the nation and world who are in
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need
of
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support
and aid.
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these
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charities
becomes a
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good
source for anyone who
is interested
in assisting
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someone
problems
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around
the global circle. After helping the
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locals
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around
your surrounding you can
also
donate your
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money
to a
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charity
based hospital or to any trusted
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organisation
helping other.

In my opinion helping
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locals
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around
you or a national or international
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charity
does not matter as your
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money
is invested
in
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some
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good
cause and you are helping
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someone
in
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need
. Everyone should always try their best to
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help
any human being or any animal in
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need
whether it be at a huge scale or at a
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small
scale.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer to directly help or support people who need it in the local community, however, others prefer to give money to national or international charities.

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