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Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. v.2

Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. v. 2
Electronic transactions are gradually replacing the traditional banking system and the use of bank currency is being supplanted by credit and debit cards. The transformation towards a cashless society might be slow, but steady and widespread. This paradigm shift has both positive and negative consequences and this essay deals both with them. Primarily, electronic transactions and plastic card payments are more convenient and they are processed on the go. People neither have to carry a bulk amount of cash nor write a check - which usually takes a couple of days to clear the payment. The electronic payment system is global in nature and hassle-free. Consequently, the eCommerce industry has flourished and many individuals have their own online business without any brick and mortar shop. For instance, nowadays it has become pretty easy to shop with a VISA or a Master card, virtually from anywhere in the world. Meanwhile, with PayPal and other online payment processors, someone can sell his products online. Personally, I hate standing in a long queue to pay my utility bills, and my cards let me do it from home - a time saver indeed. On the contrary, the trend does not come without negative aspects. Although we are able to use these cards due to technological advancement, the risks of using the plastic money, however, pertain to this technology. The primary threat to such payment mode is cybersecurity and hacking. For example, once a credit card is cloned or its sensitive data is hacked, the owner would suffer a great financial loss. A technology giant like Facebook has failed to protect its user data and the misuse of user data is a global concern. Same goes for the plastic cards and online payment systems which have the same vulnerability. To conclude, albeit some adverse effects of the cards payment system, the use of plastic money for making and receiving payments is the need of the hour. It provides a plethora of advantages but we have to be careful of its use.
Electronic transactions are
gradually
replacing the traditional banking
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and the
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use
of bank currency is
being supplanted
by credit and debit
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cards
. The transformation towards a cashless society might be slow,
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but
steady and widespread. This paradigm shift has both
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positive
and
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negative
consequences and this essay deals both with them.

Primarily
, electronic transactions and
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plastic
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card
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payments
are more
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convenient and
they
are processed
on the go.
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People
neither
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have to
carry a bulk amount of cash nor write a
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check
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-
which
usually
takes a couple of days to
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clear
the
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payment
. The electronic
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payment
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system
is global in nature and hassle-free.
Consequently
, the
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eCommerce
industry has flourished and
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many
individuals have their
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own
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online
business without any brick and mortar shop.
For instance
, nowadays it has become pretty easy to shop with a VISA or a Master
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card
,
virtually
from anywhere in the world. Meanwhile, with PayPal and other
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online
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payment
processors, someone can sell his products
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online
.
Personally
, I hate standing in a long queue to pay my utility bills, and my
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cards
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let
me do it from home
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-
a time saver
indeed
.

On the contrary
, the trend does not
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come
without
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negative
aspects. Although we are able to
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use
these
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cards
due to technological advancement, the
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risks
of using the
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plastic
money,
however
, pertain to this technology. The primary threat to such
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payment
mode is cybersecurity and hacking.
For example
, once a credit
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card
is cloned
or its sensitive data
is hacked
, the owner would suffer a great financial loss. A technology giant like Facebook has failed to protect its user data and the misuse of user data is a global concern. Same goes for the
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plastic
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cards
and
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online
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payment
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systems
which have the same vulnerability.

To conclude
, albeit
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some
adverse effects of the
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cards
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payment
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system
, the
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use
of
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plastic
money for making and receiving
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payments
is the need of the hour. It provides a plethora of advantages
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but
we
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have to
be careful of its
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use
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.5
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