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27/10/2017 Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Include your personal opinion and examples based on your own experie v.1

27/10/2017 Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Include your personal opinion and examples based on your own experie v. 1
There is no doubt that the population of metropolitan cities all over the world are soaring day by day and it causes countless problems in the cities such as air pollution and higher accommodation prices. However, the possible solutions to resolve these issues for the individual and government is to use public transport and create more job opportunities respectively. One of the fundamental issues arise from big cities due to overpopulation is air pollution. To elucidate, the majority of people today tend to have a personal car in order to commute to the office on time, which increases heavy traffic on the roads. Cars run on fossil fuels and it emits hazardous pollutants in the air, which causes air pollution. Similarly, there are many industries in the urban areas which release harmful chemicals in the atmosphere, which give rise to air pollution. For example, a study by the BBC News in April 2019 reported that there has been a 20% increase in the demand for cars last years, which resulted in a deleterious impact on the earth’s environment. Another problem is the high accommodation price. Many people migrate from rural to urban areas to have a good job prospect and to provide better education to their children. As a result, these areas get overpopulated and landlords often take advantage of this by charging an exorbitant cost for accommodation. The possible solution for individuals to tackle this problem would be the use of public transport. If most people switch to public transportation rather than using own car to commute to the office, undeniably, there will be a decrease in air pollution to a certain extent. For example, in Japan, many people started using the car pooling system for commuting from home to work, which resulted in the reduction of air pollution by 25%. Another solution for the government is to create jobs for people. If the government develops rural areas by encouraging industrialists to open more factories in rural areas, this will create more jobs over there. As a result, people seem to be less inclined to come to the cities. In conclusion, air pollution and high accommodation price are very common problems which stem from urban areas owing to overpopulate. Only when the government develops rural areas and create jobs and an individual use public transport, will the problem be tackled.
There is no doubt that the population of metropolitan cities all over the world are soaring day by day and it causes countless
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problems
in the cities such as
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air
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pollution
and higher accommodation prices.
However
, the possible solutions to resolve these issues for the individual and
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government
is to
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use
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public
transport and
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create
more
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job
opportunities
respectively
.

One of the fundamental issues arise from
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big
cities due to overpopulation is
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air
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pollution
. To elucidate, the majority of
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people
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today
tend to have a personal
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car
in order to commute to the office on time, which increases heavy traffic on the roads.
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Cars
run on fossil fuels and it emits hazardous pollutants in the
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air
, which causes
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air
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pollution
.
Similarly
, there are
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many
industries in the urban
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areas
which release harmful chemicals in the atmosphere, which give rise to
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air
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pollution
.
For example
, a study by the BBC News in April 2019 reported that there has been a 20% increase in the demand for
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cars
last years, which resulted in a deleterious impact on the earth’s environment. Another
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problem
is the high accommodation price.
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Many
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people
migrate from
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rural
to urban
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areas
to have a
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good
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job
prospect and to provide better education to their children.
As a result
, these
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areas
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get
overpopulated and landlords
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often
take advantage of this by charging an exorbitant cost for accommodation.

The possible solution for individuals to tackle this
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problem
would be the
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use
of
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public
transport. If most
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people
switch to
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public
transportation
rather
than using
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own
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car
to commute to the office,
undeniably
, there will be a decrease in
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air
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pollution
to a certain extent.
For example
, in Japan,
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many
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people
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started
using the
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car
pooling system for commuting from home to work, which resulted in the reduction of
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air
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pollution
by 25%. Another solution for the
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government
is to
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create
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jobs
for
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people
. If the
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government
develops
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rural
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areas
by encouraging industrialists to open more factories in
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rural
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areas
, this will
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create
more
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jobs
over there.
As a result
,
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people
seem to be less inclined to
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come
to the cities.

In conclusion
,
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air
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pollution
and high accommodation price are
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very
common
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problems
which stem from urban
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areas
owing to overpopulate.
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Only
when the
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government
develops
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rural
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areas
and
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create
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jobs
and an individual
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use
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public
transport, will the
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problem
be tackled
.
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IELTS essay 27/10/2017 Nowadays plastic money replacements such as credit and debit cards are extremely popular, even more than banknotes and coins. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Include your personal opinion and examples based on your own experie v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
391 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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