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Nowadays people’s life is changing rapidly and, as a result, family relationships are affected. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience

These days it is noticed that life of an individual is changing quickly thus family interactions are worsen and affected. In this essay I will put forth the reasons for this discrepancy. I believe that it is too many drawbacks overall. On the one hand, to maintain relationships, communication is most important. In this modern era, the advance development of technologies have helped to overcome these difficulties. For instance, with the use of applications like WhatsApp and similar other apps have limited the barriers of communication, one can stay connected with others from any part of the world. It provides a support to maintain long distance relationship among families by staying in contact through voice and video calls. On the other hand, the main obstacle for communication is limitation of time, people have been too engaged with other programmes than family matters in their life. Many of them lost connections of their loved ones due to their busy schedule. Mostly it is noticed in families that all the members are engrossed on their phones and no one shows interest to spend time with their near and dear ones and this manner they miss some moments of happiness in life. In conclusion, I would like to reitrate that relationships have worsen and in later life one would have to face many consequences as it has many drawbacks.
These days it
is noticed
that
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life
of an individual is changing
quickly
thus
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family
interactions are
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worsen
and
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affected
. In this essay I will put forth the reasons for this discrepancy. I believe that it is too
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many
drawbacks
overall
. On the one hand, to maintain relationships, communication is most
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important
. In this modern era, the advance development of technologies have
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helped
to overcome these difficulties.
For instance
, with the
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use
of applications like WhatsApp and similar
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other
apps have limited the barriers of communication, one can stay connected with others from any part of the world. It provides a support to maintain long distance relationship among
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families
by staying in contact through voice and video calls. On the
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other
hand, the main obstacle for communication is limitation of time,
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people
have been too engaged with
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other
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programmes
than
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family
matters in their
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life
.
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Many
of them lost connections of their
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loved
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ones
due to their busy schedule.
Mostly
it
is noticed
in
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families
that all the members
are engrossed
on their phones and no one
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shows
interest to spend time with their near and dear
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ones
and this manner they miss
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some
moments of happiness in
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life
.
In conclusion
, I would like to
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reitrate
that relationships have
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worsen
and in later
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life
one would
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have to
face
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many
consequences as it has
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many
drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Nowadays people’s life is changing rapidly and, as a result, family relationships are affected. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience

Essay
  American English
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226 words
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