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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away? v.9

Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away? v. 9
These days, modern people are tending to cheeseparing a lot of nutrition, especially restaurants and shops' nutritional products are thrown away more than hand made food. In this regard, while many people believe that the main source of the problem is poor management of restaurants administrators, others feel that each individual should be responsible for their waste products. However, there are many approaches to solve this problem. Personally, I believe that sharing lunches and dinners with other people can be a viable option. On the one hand, it it true that many cafes and shops are aimed only at the income and revenue, In this regard, they are not willing to pay much attention to the long run benefits, and it is the main cause of the problem. To illustrate, many restaurants are not keen to create the system of efficient use of the nutrients. Furthermore, customers are not willing to purchase the nutrition products which are stored more than storage period. Many people believe that these two factors are influenced negatively to the food life cycle. On the other hand, there are many ways to solve this issue. The mobile phone application which helps customers to buy the foodstuffs with high discount can be an option. For example, after the storage period, buyers can purchase these items on the internet. But the price is reduced by the shops. Furthermore, sharing breakfasts, lunches and dinners with other individuals could be a second solution. In addition to this, special taxes or fines for not eating meals till the end at the restaurants can be another solution. In other words, restaurants will have a right to increase the price of the meal, if the customers do not eat it. To conclude, although many people are keen to waste nutrition products, there are many ways to reduce the amount of the food that throw away. In addition to this, in my opinion, I believe that each individual should try to not waste nutrients as much as possible.
These days, modern
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people
are tending to cheeseparing
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a lot of
nutrition,
especially
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restaurants
and shops' nutritional
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products
are thrown
away more than hand made food. In this regard, while
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many
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people
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believe
that the main source of the problem is poor management of
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restaurants
administrators, others feel that each individual should be responsible for their waste
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products
.
However
, there are
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many
approaches to solve this problem.
Personally
, I
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believe
that sharing lunches and dinners with
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other
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people
can be a viable option.

On the one hand,
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it it
true that
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many
'cafes' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "cafés"
cafes
and shops
are aimed
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only
at the income and revenue, In this regard, they are not willing to pay much attention to the long run benefits, and it is the main cause of the problem. To illustrate,
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many
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restaurants
are not keen to create the system of efficient
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use
of the nutrients.
Furthermore
, customers are not willing to
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purchase
the nutrition
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products
which
are stored
more than storage period.
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Many
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people
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believe
that these two factors
are influenced
negatively
to the food life cycle.

On the
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other
hand, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
ways to solve this issue. The mobile phone application which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
customers to
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buy
the foodstuffs with high discount can be an option.
For example
, after the storage period, buyers can
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purchase
these items on the internet.
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But
the price is
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reduced
by the shops.
Furthermore
, sharing breakfasts, lunches and dinners with
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other
individuals could be a second solution.
In addition
to this, special taxes or fines for not eating meals till the
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end
at the
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restaurants
can be another solution. In
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other
words,
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restaurants
will have a right to increase the price of the meal, if the customers do not eat it.

To conclude
, although
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many
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people
are keen to waste nutrition
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products
, there are
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many
ways to
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reduce
the amount of the food that throw away.
In addition
to this, in my opinion, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that each individual should try to not waste nutrients as much as possible.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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