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Nowadays, people waste a lot of food that is bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away? v.1

Nowadays, people waste a lot of food that is bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away? v. 1
Many people believe that in this era of extremely fast life, the food which is readily available and ready-to-eat is really helpful to cope up with time constraints. In my opinion, albeit such food do offer some advantage in terms of convenience of cooking and time management, the health-related detrimental effects outweigh any benefits it offers. On the one hand, many argue that ready-made meals like fast food and partially cooked, frozen foods are time saving for the working class. To put it another way, time is really important in this competitive business environment and those who have to work days and nights would find it extremely convenient to order fast food online or on the telephone. For instance, students and those working at night-shifts can easily order the food of their choice due to its 24/7 availability. Similarly, another advantage it offers is the ease in which some of these can be prepared. One does not require expert cooking skills to cook it. Most of these, like noodles and soups, simply require boiling in hot water with some additives given with the package to get it ready. On the other hand, the health hazards of such diet are extremely dangerous for those who consume it routinely. Firstly, the preserved food has very poor nutritional value as most of the essential vitamins and minerals would be denatured and lost during the preservation process. Secondly, the preservatives added to such foods are proven carcinogens and has been implicated in the rise in frequency of various cancers in humans. Finally, these foods are very rich in fat and refined sugar and have contributed significantly to the rise in incidence of obesity, diabetes and ischaemic heart disease. To conclude, admittedly there are some minor benefits of convenience food, yet its poor nutritional value and contribution to the rise in frequency of diseases like cancers, obesity, and diabetes is beyond question and outweigh the advantages. I, therefore, recommend a reduction in consumption of such foods as much as possible
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people
believe that in this era of
extremely
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fast
life, the
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food
which is
readily
available and ready-to-eat is
really
helpful to cope up with
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time
constraints. In my opinion, albeit such
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food
do offer
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some
advantage in terms of convenience of cooking and
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time
management, the health-related detrimental effects outweigh any benefits it offers.

On the one hand,
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many
argue that ready-made meals like
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fast
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food
and
partially
cooked, frozen
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foods
are
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time
saving for the working
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class
. To put it another way,
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time
is
really
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important
in this competitive business environment and those who
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have to
work days and nights would find it
extremely
convenient to order
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fast
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food
online or on the telephone.
For instance
, students and those working at night-shifts can
easily
order the
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food
of their choice due to its 24/7 availability.
Similarly
, another advantage it offers is the
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ease
in which
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some
of these can
be prepared
. One does not require expert cooking
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skills
to cook it. Most of these, like noodles and soups,
simply
require boiling in hot water with
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some
additives
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given
with the package to
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get
it ready.

On the other hand
, the health hazards of such diet are
extremely
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dangerous
for those who consume it
routinely
.
Firstly
, the preserved
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food
has
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very
poor nutritional value as most of the essential vitamins and minerals would
be denatured
and lost during the preservation process.
Secondly
, the preservatives
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added
to such
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foods
are proven
carcinogens and has
been implicated
in the rise in frequency of various cancers in humans.
Finally
, these
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foods
are
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very
rich in
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fat
and refined sugar and have contributed
significantly
to the rise in incidence of obesity, diabetes and
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ischaemic
heart disease.

To conclude
,
admittedly
there are
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some
minor benefits of convenience
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food
,
yet
its poor nutritional value and contribution to the rise in frequency of diseases like cancers, obesity, and diabetes is beyond question and outweigh the advantages. I,
therefore
, recommend a reduction in consumption of such
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foods
as much as possible
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays, people waste a lot of food that is bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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