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Nowadays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why do they do this? Is it a possible or negative trend? v.5

Nowadays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why do they do this? Is it a possible or negative trend? v. 5
Social media is a powerful tool to know about what is going on in the world. It has been observed that individuals utilise social media as a source to be aware of the news. This essay explains the reasons for this phenomena and argues why this is a negative trend. The majority of people use platforms like twitter, Facebook and Instagram to be updated about the current affairs because of convenience and can be accessed effortlessly. The individuals can browse their news feed, which provides them a lot of information that is trending in the world. This way, they do not have to wait for newspapers to find out the news. For instance, Facebook updates users with the data they were looking for irrespective of time zone and place. Moreover, the news is easily accessible through hashtags and search options. On twitter, people can visit trending hashtags that gives them the idea of several aspects through articles. In short, people prefer virtual media to learn newscast as it is convenient and accessible. In contrast, there are few issues accommodated with this approach as they expose personal matters of prominent people and sometimes, creates misconceptions. Certainly, popular people lack privacy and most of their significant information gets revealed through various sources. For example, details about political leaders or celebrities is exposed on social media platforms invading their privacy. Besides that, there is a possibility of misleading information, which causes anxiety in the individuals. The wrong data about infectious diseases leads to citizens panicking unnecessarily could be considered as an illustration. Clearly, it is cynical as it invades seclusion and generates dubious opinions. In conclusion, although people use online networking as it is convenient and accessible, it is also considered as pessimistic as it reveals private matters and spreads wrong information.
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been observed
that individuals
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as a source to be aware of the
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. This essay
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negative
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people
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use
platforms like twitter, Facebook and Instagram to
be updated
about the
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current
affairs
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because
of convenience and can
be accessed
effortlessly
. The individuals can browse their
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news
feed, which provides them
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a lot of
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information
that is
trending in the world. This way, they do not
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have to
wait for newspapers to find out the
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news
.
For instance
, Facebook updates users with the data they were looking for irrespective of time zone and place.
Moreover
, the
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news
is
easily
accessible through hashtags and search options. On twitter,
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people
can visit trending hashtags that gives them the
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idea
of several aspects through articles. In short,
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people
prefer virtual
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media
to learn newscast as it is convenient and accessible.

In contrast
, there are few issues accommodated with this approach as they expose personal matters of prominent
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people
and
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sometimes
, creates misconceptions.
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, popular
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people
lack privacy and most of their significant
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information
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gets
revealed through various sources.
For example
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details
about political leaders or celebrities
is exposed
on social
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media
platforms invading their privacy.
Besides
that, there is a possibility of misleading
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information
, which causes anxiety in the individuals. The
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wrong
data about infectious diseases leads to citizens panicking
unnecessarily
could
be considered
as an illustration.
Clearly
, it is cynical as it invades seclusion and generates dubious opinions.

In conclusion
, although
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people
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use
online networking as it is convenient and accessible, it is
also
considered as pessimistic as it reveals private matters and spreads
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wrong
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information
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays people use social media to keep up with the news. Why do they do this? Is it a possible or negative trend? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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