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Nowadays, people buy more goods that are better advertised than products they actually need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, people buy more goods that are better advertised than products they actually need. MBVXe
Sheer advertising of products increases their reach to the public at large. In recent times, people purchase products that have been better advertised than the ones they actually require or are useful to them. I believe that commercial promotions increase the marketability of the goods to a greater extent and also persuade people about the genuineness of the usage of the product. These scenarios will be further detailed in the essay. First of all, the product advertised in different platforms of communication increases the marketability which in turn increases the sales as more customers are lured towards buying the product. Had there been no promotion, the public would have never known about the items and they would have rarely bought the same. This is the usual scenario in most of the cases as people have always preferred to purchase the goods for which they are aware, they know the feature, usage and also are familiar with. For instance, people prefer buy Unilever's household products because of its vivid advertisements in televisions, newspapers and also in online platforms. In addition, the advertisements have always assisted to persuade the people because it generates awareness amongst the people about the usefulness of the product. Moreover, this will help people to identify what products are actually satisfying their needs. Nobody purchases the item if they don't know about it and it rarely comes to their mind to have one of them in their possession. This is a human tendency to go with the thing which they are familiar with and leave the product which is alien to them. For example, if I had cold, I would purchase "D'cold" to cure it because I have seen that it has cured cold in TV ads. To conclude, the commercial promotion of the goods has always acquired peoples' attention and made them to buy the same. Therefore, I am totally in favor of the fact that people buy products that are better advertised than they actually need.
Sheer advertising of
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products
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increases
their reach to the public at large. In recent times,
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people
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purchase
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products
that have been better advertised than the ones they actually require or are useful to them. I believe that commercial promotions
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increase
the marketability of the
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goods
to a greater extent and
also
persuade
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people
about the genuineness of the usage of the
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product
. These scenarios will be
further
detailed in the essay.

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First of all
, the
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product
advertised in
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different
platforms of communication
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increases
the marketability which in turn
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increases
the sales as more customers
are lured
towards buying the
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product
. Had there been no promotion, the public would have never known about the
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items and
they would have rarely
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bought
the same. This is the usual scenario in most of the cases as
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people
have always preferred to
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purchase
the
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goods
for which they are aware, they know the feature, usage and
also
are familiar with.
For instance
,
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people
prefer
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buy
Unilever's household
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products
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because
of its vivid advertisements in televisions, newspapers and
also
in online platforms.
In addition
, the advertisements have always assisted to persuade the
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people
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because
it generates awareness amongst the
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people
about the usefulness of the
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product
.
Moreover
, this will
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help
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people
to identify what
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products
are actually satisfying their needs. Nobody
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purchases
the item if they don't know about it and it rarely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to their mind to have one of them in their possession. This is a human tendency to
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go with
the thing which they are familiar with and
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leave
the
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product
which is alien to them.
For example
, if I had
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cold
, I would
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purchase
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D'
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cold
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"
to cure it
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because
I have
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seen
that it has cured
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cold
in TV ads.

To conclude
, the commercial promotion of the
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goods
has always acquired peoples' attention and made them to
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buy
the same.
Therefore
, I am
totally
in favor of the fact that
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people
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buy
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products
that are better advertised than they actually need.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, people buy more goods that are better advertised than products they actually need.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
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