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Nowadays, people believe that the environment influences their accomplishments. Some people think their success and accomplishment were influenced by the places where they grew up. Do you think the environment does or does not affect people’s accomplishment and how it affects? Please give an example of a famous person to support your statement.

Nowadays, people believe that the environment influences their accomplishments. Some people think their success and accomplishment were influenced by the places where they grew up. Do you think the environment does or does not affect people’s accomplishment and how it affects? Please give an example of a famous person to support your statement. RkowW
These days, the importance of our desires ehcih was always debatable, has now become more controverisal. It can be agreed the fact of this matter has some convincing agruments, despite the contentions about it. In this essay, I will elaborate my point of view on the given notion in the forthcoming paragraphs before drawing a reasonable conclusion. To begin with, there are numerous reasons of the environment impacts of the people accomplishment. Some individual consider that sucess and accomplishment always depand on place where we grew up. I believe it is true becuase according to atmosphere people can thing on their requirment other no. For example, a person who lives in the well- settled colony and he or she knows who to communicate with their neighbours and how to build their standards and thinking as well as he or she can know about the eductaion, work and so on. For this reason, the importance of environment influences is not be ignored. Additionally, people who believe environment does not effect on the desires and it competely depend on the person. I think environment help to build our confidence level. Students who belong to lower families but their friendship circle high standard. They always think like that because they about the new technology and things which help to develop the desire. For example, In former President A. P. J Abdul kalam of India, who belongs to poor family but he studied in the high grade school. I believe according to social environment they develop themselves and became a physics scientist as well. Therefore, the importance of the social circle is undenible. After anaysing the above discusssion, It can be concluded that environment influence always play big role on our desires.
These days, the importance of our
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desires
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ehcih
was always debatable,
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has
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now
become more
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controverisal
. It can be
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agreed
the fact of this matter has
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agruments
, despite the contentions about it. In this essay, I will elaborate my point of view on the
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given
notion in the forthcoming paragraphs
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before
drawing a reasonable conclusion.

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begin
with, there are numerous reasons of the
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environment
impacts of the
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people
accomplishment.
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Some
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individual
consider that
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sucess
and accomplishment always
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depand
on place where we grew up. I believe it is true
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becuase
according to atmosphere
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people
can thing on their
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requirment
other no.
For example
, a person
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who
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lives
in the well- settled
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colony and
he or she knows
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who
to communicate with their
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neighbours
and how to build their standards and thinking
as well
as he or she can know about the
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eductaion
, work and
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so
on.
For this reason
, the importance of
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environment
influences is not be
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ignored
.

Additionally
,
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people
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who
believe
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environment
does not
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effect
on the
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desires
and it
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competely
depend on the person. I
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think
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environment
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help
to build our confidence level. Students
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who
belong to lower families
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but
their friendship circle high standard. They always
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think
like that
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because
they about the new technology and things which
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help
to develop the
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desire
.
For example
, In former President A. P. J Abdul
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kalam
of India,
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who
belongs to poor family
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but
he studied in the high grade school. I believe according to social
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environment
they develop themselves and became a physics scientist
as well
.
Therefore
, the importance of the social circle is
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undenible
.

After
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anaysing
the above
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discusssion
, It can
be concluded
that
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environment
influence always play
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big
role on our
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desires
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, people believe that the environment influences their accomplishments. Some people think their success and accomplishment were influenced by the places where they grew up. Do you think the environment does or does not affect people’s accomplishment and how it affects? Please give an example of a famous person to support your statement.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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