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It is a common aspiration among many young people to run their own business, rather than work for an a employer.

It is a common aspiration among many young people to run their own business, rather than work for an a employer. k6ljR
The world is changing and the development speedy of different industries are impacting to people’s lives and their thoughts. There is a fact people are different and they have many several ambitions, dreams, ideas, thoughts about their lives. People, especially young people are motivated to manage their own businesses and earn enough money for living well. There are some advantages and disadvantages of running own business. On the one hand, there are plenty of job opportunities nowadays and you can choose easily the job which you want to manage and think you earn a lot of money from this work. If you run your own business, you are in charge of everything related to job. You can make your own decisions and you can be creative. You are freedom and you do not follow someone’s ideas and ambitions. You ought to solve the problems in every circumstances and this fact makes your personal qualities improve. If your job is successful, you can keep majority of profits and accept every awards. I believe managing own job well is a big achievement in your life and if you can take pleasure from your work, you are lucky. On the other hand, you have to take more responsibilities and do more work than your employees. If you want to start new job, you ought to know a lot of things related to your job and have some experiences in your field. It is hard to make challenging and risky decisions. You work under pressure and this fact can make you feel stressful. Moreover, you have to manage your employees too and make for them comfortable business environment and pay their salaries in time. If you business is unsuccessful, you can be in debt and blame on yourself entire life. In my opinion, it is a challenging decision that you make and you have to be more determined. In conclusion, there are plenty of risks, difficulties of managing own business, however if you have a really good start-up idea and you care your freedom more than everything, you ought to take a risk. However, at first you have to learn management and find a solution in every circumstances. You have to have a plan in each situation and be more determined, open minded and strong.
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different
industries are impacting to
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people’s
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lives
and their thoughts. There is a fact
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people
are
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different and
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several ambitions, dreams,
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ideas
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lives
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people
are motivated
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own
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businesses
and earn
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enough
money for living well. There are
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some
advantages and disadvantages of running
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own
business.

On the one hand, there are
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plenty
of
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job
opportunities nowadays and you can choose
easily
the
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job
which you want to manage and
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think
you earn
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a lot of
money from this
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work
. If you run your
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own
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business
, you are in charge of everything related to
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job
. You can
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make
your
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own
decisions and you can be creative. You are freedom and you do not follow someone’s
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ideas
and ambitions.
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You
ought to solve the problems in every
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and this fact
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makes
your personal qualities
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improve
. If your
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job
is successful, you can
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keep
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majority of
profits and accept every
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awards
. I believe managing
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own
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job
well is a
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big
achievement in your life and if you can take pleasure from your
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work
, you are lucky.

On the other hand
, you
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have to
take more responsibilities and do more
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work
than your employees. If you want to
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start
new
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job
, you ought to know
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a lot of
things related to your
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job
and have
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some
experiences in your field. It is
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hard
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make
challenging and risky decisions. You
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work
under pressure and this fact can
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make
you feel stressful.
Moreover
, you
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have to
manage your employees too and
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make
for them comfortable
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business
environment and pay their salaries in time. If you
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business
is unsuccessful, you can be in debt and blame on yourself entire life. In my opinion, it is a challenging decision that you
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make
and you
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have to
be more determined.

In conclusion
, there are
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plenty
of
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risks
, difficulties of managing
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own
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business
,
however
if you have a
really
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good
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start
-up
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idea
and you care your freedom more than everything, you ought to take a
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risk
.
However
, at
first
you
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have to
learn management and find a solution in every
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circumstances
. You
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have a plan in each situation and be more determined,
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open minded
and strong.
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IELTS essay It is a common aspiration among many young people to run their own business, rather than work for an a employer.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
381 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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