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Nowadays, overweight is becoming a serious issue. Some people suggest the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, overweight is becoming a serious issue. Some people suggest the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening food. 6wdx

The problem of overweight is one of the most troublesome signs of deteriorating public health. Many people are suffering from obesity and some hold the opinion that the effective remedy is to raise the cost of unhealthy food. While I agree that this action may bring certain merits, one could argue that there are far more suitable solutions. On the one hand, it is advisable to reduce the obesity rate by increasing fattening food’s price due to the correlation between fast food and health. Since people are living in a fast-paced society, fast food chains are becoming more ubiquitous and cheaper in order to satisfy customers’ demand. If the price of junk food goes up and nutritious options are more widely available, there is a likelihood that fewer people would opt for the unhealthy ones. Obviously, when the demand for fattening meals goes down, this can help minimize the risks of contracting obesity. On the other hand, one would contend that a more drastic measure to combat the obesity crisis starts from the family. This is because parents should act as role models for children to imitate by cooking healthy home-cooked meals and make sure the whole family has sufficient physical activities on a daily basis. Mothers can substitute ready-made meals and fizzy drinks with food with less fat and sugary contents, fresh vegetables, or fruits. Moreover, the family can schedule a suitable timeframe to walk or play sports, which not only helps with weight control but also can tighten family bonds. As a result, it is undeniable that the effectiveness of the solution to impose a tax on fast food is pale in comparison to the proposed initiative. In conclusion, it is true that obesity is growing at an alarming rate. Establishing a well- balanced eating habit from the family is proven to be more effective in handling this problem instead of focusing only on raising the price of unhealthy ready-made meals. Unless people take actions now, the younger generation shall be outlived by their parents and even grandparents.

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