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Nowadays, online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. It is a positive or a negative development? Discuss the reasons and effects of online shopping.

Nowadays, online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. It is a positive or a negative development? Discuss the reasons and effects of online shopping. 7aPq2
In a technology-driven society, the form of shopping has considerably altered. People have a tendency to use e-shopping via computers or mobile phones instead of going shopping directly in the store. While there is an undoubted benefit of this trend, the convenience, there are also significant drawbacks, namely the unguaranteed quality of products. This essay will look at both sides and argue that the advantage outweighs the disadvantages. One of the most important advantages of online shopping is the convenience. Not to mention, it is time-saving. It is the fact that more and more white collar workers as well as blue collar workers are under severe pressure of time-working, so they do not have much time to go shopping. Thanks to e-shopping services, customers easily get all the information of goods relating to price and quality to make a decision whether or not to buy them. As a result, people can spend their time with their families and do more productive things. For example, instead of spending precious time sitting in traffic, people will have time to do exercises or read books which is more beneficial than wasting time in the store. That being said, online shopping has gradually become a common shopping habit of people all over the world due to its convenience. However, the main drawback of online shopping is that people are unsure about the quality of the products. This is because the customers are unable to see or touch the products so the quality of products may be lower than its advertisements. Besides, the appearance of products is not as attractive as the photographs the sellers give because producers took photographs of their products with highly advanced technology. From my own experience, I used to buy a hair-dryer via shopee-a popular e-shopping app in Vietnam, it is smaller than the one I see in the photograph and it is not beautiful as it is shown in the app. Therefore, it is obvious that buyers may be cheated the quality of products they buy. In conclusion, online shopping has brought advantage, including the convenience for buyers, in addition to the disadvantage, the unguaranteed quality of products. It is personally believed that the advantage outweighs the disadvantage in the context of technological development.
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has
considerably
altered.
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have a tendency to
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use
e-shopping via computers or mobile phones
instead
of going
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shopping
directly
in the store. While there is an undoubted benefit of this trend, the convenience, there are
also
significant drawbacks,
namely
the
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unguaranteed
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quality
of
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products
. This essay will look at both sides and argue that the
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advantage
outweighs the disadvantages.

One of the most
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important
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advantages
of
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online
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shopping
is the convenience. Not to mention, it is time-saving. It is the fact that more and more white collar workers
as well
as blue collar workers are under severe pressure of time-working,
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so
they do not have much
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time
to go
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shopping
. Thanks to e-shopping services, customers
easily
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get
all the information of
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goods
relating to price and
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quality
to
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make
a decision
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whether or not
to
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buy
them.
As a result
,
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people
can spend their
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time
with their families and do more productive things.
For example
,
instead
of spending precious
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time
sitting in traffic,
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people
will have
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time
to do exercises or read books which is more beneficial than wasting
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time
in the store. That
being said
,
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online
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shopping
has
gradually
become a common
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shopping
habit of
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people
all over the world due to its convenience.

However
, the main drawback of
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online
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shopping
is that
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people
are unsure about the
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quality
of the
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products
. This is
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because
the customers are unable to
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see
or touch the
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products
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so
the
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quality
of
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products
may be lower than its advertisements.
Besides
, the appearance of
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products
is not as attractive as the photographs the sellers give
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because
producers took photographs of their
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products
with
highly
advanced technology. From my
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own
experience, I
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used
to
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buy
a hair-dryer via
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shopee-a
popular e-shopping app in Vietnam, it is smaller than the one I
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see
in the photograph and it is not
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beautiful
as it
is shown
in the app.
Therefore
, it is obvious that buyers may
be cheated
the
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quality
of
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products
they
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buy
.

In conclusion
,
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online
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shopping
has brought
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advantage
, including the convenience for buyers,
in addition
to the disadvantage, the
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unguaranteed
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quality
of
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products
. It is
personally
believed that the
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advantage
outweighs the disadvantage in the context of technological development.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. It is a positive or a negative development? Discuss the reasons and effects of online shopping.

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