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Many efforts have been made by countries to address problems concerning the environment but the system has not improved. What are the possible reasons and solutions of this situation?

Many efforts have been made by countries to address problems concerning the environment but the system has not improved. What are the possible reasons and solutions of this situation? QLlaP
It is undoubtedly true that environment is our shared inheritance and maintaining its good health is everyone's responsibility. Numerous initiatives have been taken to upkeep environment but desirable outcomes not achieved yet. This essay will look for the probable reading and solutions to combat this situation in subsequent paragraphs. Discussing the reason, paramount one is the lack of coordinated activities between various countries. Every nation plans their environment improvement initiatives based on their preferences and comfort considering local conditions. For example, India's preference is to replace non-renewable sources to energy to renewable sources like electricity, solar panels, etc. to save environment degradation. However, USA is focussing to cut down pollution. Due to these uncoordinated efforts, desirable results are not achieved. Every nation is contributing a bit but in haphazard direction, which results in nullifying each other's efforts and poor condition prevails. Out of all the solutions for addressing environmental concern, the strongest one is the need of federal system having one central governing body with subordinate bodies at various countries level. This kind of system ensures coordinated efforts and directional flow of communication. For example, WHO is international body with aim to upkeep good health conditions of citizen in all countries and have subordinate bodies in each country, which acts in close coordination with WHO and their respective country. WHO efforts in controlling COVID-19 pandemic is worth praisable. In the same way, desired outcomes can be expected by implementing similar system to address climate related issues. Thus, to conclude, it can be finally commented that uncoordinated activities are the root cause for non improvement in environment conditions and federal system, similar to WHO, is required to gain desirable results.
It is
undoubtedly
true that
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environment
is our shared inheritance and maintaining its
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good
health is everyone's responsibility. Numerous initiatives have
been taken
to upkeep
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environment
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but
desirable outcomes not achieved
yet
. This essay will look for the probable reading and solutions to combat this situation in subsequent paragraphs.

Discussing the reason, paramount one is the lack of coordinated activities between various
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countries
. Every nation plans their
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environment
improvement initiatives based on their preferences and comfort considering local conditions.
For example
, India's preference is to replace non-renewable sources to energy to renewable sources like electricity, solar panels, etc. to save
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environment
degradation.
However
, USA is focussing to
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cut
down pollution. Due to these uncoordinated
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efforts
, desirable results are not achieved. Every nation is contributing a bit
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but
in haphazard direction, which results in nullifying each other's
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efforts
and poor
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condition
prevails.

Out of all the solutions for addressing environmental concern, the strongest one is the need of federal
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system
having one central governing
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body
with subordinate
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bodies
at various
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countries
level. This kind of
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system
ensures coordinated
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efforts
and directional flow of communication.
For example
,
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WHO
is international
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body
with aim to upkeep
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good
health conditions of citizen in all
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countries
and have subordinate
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bodies
in each
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country
, which acts in close coordination with
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WHO
and their respective
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country
.
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WHO
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efforts
in controlling COVID-19 pandemic is worth
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praisable
.
In the same way
, desired outcomes can be
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expected
by implementing similar
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system
to address climate related issues.

Thus
,
to conclude
, it can be
finally
commented that uncoordinated activities are the root cause for non improvement in
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environment
conditions and federal
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system
, similar to
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WHO
,
is required
to gain desirable results.
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IELTS essay Many efforts have been made by countries to address problems concerning the environment but the system has not improved. What are the possible reasons and solutions of this situation?

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