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Nowadays most people wear western clothing rather than their traditional clothes. What are the reasons for it? Is it a positive or a negative development? v.1

Nowadays most people wear western clothing rather than their traditional clothes. What are the reasons for it? Is it a positive or a negative development? v. 1
There is no denying the fact that western clothes are becoming popular all over the world. They are stylish, practical and suit a variety of body types. In my opinion, the worldwide adoption of western clothes is a positive thing. Much of the popularity of western clothes can be attributed to the fact that western countries are the center of education and business. They attract students and professionals from all over the world. Hollywood films also played an important role in making western clothes popular all over the world. The biggest advantage of wearing western clothes is that they protect the wearer from dress-based discrimination. This is important in the modern world where people are migrating to foreign nations to study or work. An Asian student wearing western outfits on a campus in the US or Europe is less likely to feel cultural alienation. The fact that he is also wearing the same outfits as other students on the campus makes it easy for him to fit into the new surroundings. Another advantage of wearing western clothes is that they are available practically everywhere. You can buy them from just about any shop and that eliminates the need to carry bundles of clothing with you when you travel abroad. This is not exactly the case with traditional outfits. In many cases, you can only buy them from your country. For example, Indian outfits like dhoti, sari or salwar kameez are not readily available in many parts of the world. So, if an Indian living abroad insists on wearing only Indian clothes, he will face a lot of difficulty. By adopting western clothes they can get around this difficulty. To conclude, the adoption of western outfits is a positive thing. Western countries are regarded as the land of opportunities. This is exactly the reason that made western clothing popular all over the world.
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clothes
are becoming popular all
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over
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world
. They are stylish, practical and suit a variety of body types. In my opinion, the worldwide adoption of western
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clothes
is a
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positive
thing.

Much of the popularity of western
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clothes
can
be attributed
to the fact that western countries are the center of education and business. They attract students and professionals from all
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over
the
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world
. Hollywood films
also
played an
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important
role in making western
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clothes
popular all
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over
the world.

The biggest advantage of wearing western
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clothes
is that they protect the wearer from dress-based discrimination. This is
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important
in the modern
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world
where
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people
are migrating to foreign nations to study or work. An Asian student wearing western outfits on a campus in the US or Europe is less likely to feel cultural alienation. The fact that he is
also
wearing the same outfits as other students on the campus
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makes
it easy for him to fit into the new surroundings.

Another advantage of wearing western
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clothes
is that they are available
practically
everywhere. You can
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buy
them from
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just
about any shop and that eliminates the need to carry bundles of clothing with you when you travel abroad. This is not exactly the case with traditional outfits. In
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many
cases, you can
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buy
them from your country.
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available in
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many
parts of the
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world
.
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So
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only
Indian
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, he will face
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a lot of
difficulty. By adopting western
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they can
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get
around this difficulty.

To conclude
, the adoption of western outfits is a
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positive
thing. Western countries
are regarded
as the land of opportunities. This is exactly the reason that made western clothing popular all
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over
the
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world
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays most people wear western clothing rather than their traditional clothes. What are the reasons for it? Is it a positive or a negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
312 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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