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Nowadays more people get married to someone of a different culture than they ever did. v.4

Nowadays more people get married to someone of a different culture than they ever did. v. 4
Traditionally people get married to someone of the same culture, religion and country and sometimes they are so inclined to their customs that they cannot even imagine of getting married to someone who has a different cast and social status. Marriage brings two persons together and forms a family and with the time, marrying in a different culture (mixed marriage as they call it) has become common and socially accepted. Technological advancements, changes in social belief, and freedom for choosing a life partner among young have accelerated this trend and many of these cross cultural marriages indeed are working too well. To begin with, people have technologies on their hands and make friends across the border. An increasing number of people these days go to study in a foreign country and live in a cross-cultural environment. This has broken their outdated social belief to a great extent and they have a broader perspective of life and marriage. Moreover, young people have greater freedoms in choosing their life partners unlike the past when parents primarily picked a bride or bridegroom for someone. Society in most of the countries seems like have accepted this freedom and welcome marriage beyond the known boundary. Cross cultural marriage has several benefits. People have different inherent features and strength based on their culture, race, geographic location and family and it is often noticed that children of such cross-cultural couples are stronger and have diverse capabilities. Two people from totally different cultures, when get married, take time to understand each other and this often strengthens their conjugal relationship. They learn about other’s tradition, culture, belief, language and this opens up an entirely new world to them. Such marriage often teaches people to become more tolerant to other races, culture and custom and it often helps people to discover themselves from a neutral point of view rather than the biased view of inherent culture and tradition. This type of marriage has some disadvantages too. Family, friends and relatives often have misconceptions of such couples and keep their distance. Mixed marriages often force people to accept an alien way of life that they cannot completely cope with. Children in such families often find it hard to adhere to a particular culture and end up adopting a pseudo-cultural identity. Finally, such marriage often ends in bitter experience as couples fail to understand each other properly. To conclude, mix-cultural marriages are nowadays more accepted in our society and social changes, people’s freedom to choose a life partner have greatly made it possible. Despite some problems, this type of marriage is working too well to consider it a mainstream trend.
Traditionally
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people
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get
married to someone of the same
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culture
, religion and country and
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sometimes
they are
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so
inclined to their customs that they cannot even imagine of getting married to someone who has a
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different
cast and
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social
status.
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Marriage
brings two persons together and forms a
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family
and with the time, marrying in a
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different
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culture
(mixed
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marriage
as they call it) has become common and
socially
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accepted
. Technological advancements,
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changes
in
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social
belief, and
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freedom
for choosing a
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life
partner among young have accelerated this trend and
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many
of these cross cultural
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marriages
indeed
are working too well.

To
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begin
with,
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people
have technologies on their hands and
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make
friends across the border. An increasing number of
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people
these days go to study in a foreign country and
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live
in a cross-cultural environment. This has broken their outdated
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social
belief to a great
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extent and
they have a broader perspective of
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life
and
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marriage
.
Moreover
, young
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people
have greater
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freedoms
in choosing their
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life
partners unlike the past when parents
primarily
picked a bride or bridegroom for someone. Society in most of the countries seems like have
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accepted
this
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freedom
and welcome
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marriage
beyond the known boundary.

Cross cultural
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marriage
has several benefits.
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People
have
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different
inherent features and strength based on their
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culture
, race, geographic location and
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family
and it is
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often
noticed that children of such cross-cultural couples are stronger and have diverse capabilities. Two
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people
from
totally
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different
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cultures
, when
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get
married, take time to understand each
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other
and this
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often
strengthens their conjugal relationship. They learn about
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other’s
tradition,
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culture
, belief, language and this opens up an
entirely
new world to them. Such
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marriage
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often
teaches
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people
to become more tolerant to
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other
races,
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culture
and custom and it
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often
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helps
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people
to discover themselves from a neutral point of view
rather
than the biased view of inherent
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culture
and tradition.

This type of
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marriage
has
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some
disadvantages too.
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Family
, friends and relatives
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often
have misconceptions of such couples and
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keep
their distance. Mixed
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marriages
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often
force
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people
to accept an alien way of
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life
that they cannot completely cope with. Children in such
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families
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often
find it
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hard
to adhere to a particular
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culture
and
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end
up adopting a pseudo-cultural identity.
Finally
, such
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marriage
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often
ends in bitter experience as couples fail to understand each
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other
properly
.

To conclude
, mix-cultural
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marriages
are nowadays more
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accepted
in our society and
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social
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changes
,
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people’s
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freedom
to choose a
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life
partner have
greatly
made it possible. Despite
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some
problems, this type of
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marriage
is working too well to consider it a mainstream trend.
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63Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays more people get married to someone of a different culture than they ever did. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
438 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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