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Nowadays, more and more people read news on the internet. However, newspapers have most of important information sources of news. Give your opinion from your experience and give examples. v.3

Nowadays, more and more people read news on the internet. However, newspapers have most of important information sources of news. Give your opinion from your experience and give examples. v. 3
In recent years, there is a common belief that newspaper in print are of no use to us any longer due to the availability of news on the Internet. From my perspective, I totally disagree with it for the following reasons. On the one hand, some may argue that we do not need to print newspapers anymore as they are available online. News on global issue is virtually accessible from any computers or other smart gadgets such as mobile phones that have a stable Internet connection. For instance, the Times paper in New York reports the same events that are available printed as well as on their official website, which negates the need of purchasing a printed copy at a news agency. For this reason, it is understandable that people opine that this type of newspaper are no longer needed. On the other hand, there will still be a necessity for printed newspaper as not everybody prefers to read the news online or on television. The older generation, particularly those who are not as technologically savvy as the younger tend to prefer physcial newspaper to digital news. For example, the elderly like our grantparents who are used to published articles their whole lives would less likely change their habits to read news online as some of them may even not know how to do so. Thus, those in rural areas who have limited access to the Internet heavily depend on the publication of printed materials, fortifying the need which will last for decades to come. In conclusion, whilst digital news will certainly thrive and dwindle the need for printed media, a portion of people still opt for printed newspaper due to their long existence in the mind of older generation and its unreliance on the Internet speed.
In recent years, there is a common belief that
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newspaper
in print are of no
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use
to us any longer due to the availability of
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news
on the Internet. From my perspective, I
totally
disagree with it for the following reasons.

On the one hand,
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some
may argue that we do not
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need
to print
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newspapers
anymore as they are available online.
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News
on global issue is
virtually
accessible from any computers or other smart gadgets such as mobile phones that have a stable Internet connection.
For instance
, the Times paper in
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New
York reports the same
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events
that are available
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printed
as well
as on their official website, which negates the
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need
of purchasing a
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printed
copy at a
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news
agency.
For this reason
, it is understandable that
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people
opine that this type of
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newspaper
are no longer needed.

On the other hand
, there will
still
be a necessity for
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printed
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newspaper
as not everybody prefers to read the
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news
online or on television. The older generation,
particularly
those who are not as
technologically
savvy as the younger tend to prefer
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physcial
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newspaper
to digital
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news
.
For example
, the elderly like our
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grantparents
who are
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used
to published articles their whole
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lives
would less likely
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change
their habits to read
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news
online as
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some
of them may even not know how to do
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so
.
Thus
, those in rural areas who have limited access to the Internet
heavily
depend on the publication of
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printed
materials, fortifying the
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need
which will last for decades to
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come
.

In conclusion
, whilst digital
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news
will
certainly
thrive and dwindle the
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need
for
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printed
media, a portion of
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people
still
opt for
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printed
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newspaper
due to their long existence in the mind of older generation and its
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unreliance
on the Internet speed.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more people read news on the internet. However, newspapers have most of important information sources of news. Give your opinion from your experience and give examples. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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