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Nowadays, more and more people engage in dangerous activities, such as sky diving and motorcycling. Are you in favour of them? Use examples to support your opinion.

Nowadays, more and more people engage in dangerous activities, such as sky diving and motorcycling. Are you in favour of them? Use examples to support your opinion. 9LAEW
The impact of dangerous sport, which was always debatable, has now become more controversial. While some people believe that engaging in dangerous activities can bring advantages to their health and well-being, others claim that this can bring more problems than benefits. This essay will elaborate on both sides of the debate and thus lead to a logical conclusion. At the outset, there are numerous reasons why engaging in dangerous activities can bring advantages, but the most preponderant one lies in the fact that Many people prefer these dangerous sports because they still enjoy these activities due to their high adrenaline level, but the most preponderant one lies in the fact that encouraging people to try new activities results in building up team spirit and promoting positive. An instance illustrating action is the fact that the survey conducted at the University of Canberra, which indicates that 60% of people in Japan make them stronger mentally and physically. Furthermore, another point to be taken into consideration is that some like this type of sports to earn celebrity status. Nevertheless, some people adopt an opposing view and tend to believe that engaging in dangerous activities like sky diving would bring an enormous disadvantage. It is largely attributed to the fact that every sport has a danger, extreme sports athletes are at a high risk of serious injuries. For instance, Michael Schumacher was left fighting for his life after a dreadful ski accident in the French Alps 2 years ago. In conclusion, while there are strong arguments on both sides of the debate, I strongly believe that it is safe to practice any sport you like with enough planning and adequate training, However, it is in my considered opinion that these sports should be tried under proper guidance and supervision.
The impact of
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, which was always debatable, has
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now
become more controversial. While
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some
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people
believe that engaging in
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dangerous
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activities
can
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bring
advantages to their health and well-being, others claim that this can
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bring
more problems than benefits. This essay will elaborate on both sides of the debate and
thus
lead to a logical conclusion.

At the outset, there are numerous reasons why engaging in
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dangerous
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activities
can
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bring
advantages,
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but
the most preponderant one lies in the
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fact
that
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Many
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people
prefer these
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dangerous
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sports
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because
they
still
enjoy these
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activities
due to their high adrenaline level,
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but
the most preponderant one lies in the
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fact
that encouraging
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people
to try new
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activities
results in building up team spirit and promoting
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positive
. An instance illustrating action is the
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fact
that the survey conducted at the University of Canberra, which indicates that 60% of
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people
in Japan
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make
them stronger mentally and
physically
.
Furthermore
, another point to
be taken
into consideration is that
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some
like this type of
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sports
to earn celebrity status.

Nevertheless
,
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some
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people
adopt an opposing view and tend to believe that engaging in
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dangerous
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activities
like
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sky diving
would
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bring
an enormous disadvantage. It is
largely
attributed to the
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fact
that every
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sport
has a
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danger
, extreme
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sports
athletes are at a high
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risk
of serious injuries.
For instance
, Michael Schumacher was
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left
fighting for his life after a dreadful ski accident in the French Alps 2 years ago.

In conclusion
, while there are strong arguments on both sides of the debate, I
strongly
believe that it is safe to practice any
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sport
you like with
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enough
planning and adequate training,
However
, it is in my considered opinion that these
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sports
should
be tried
under proper guidance and supervision.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more people engage in dangerous activities, such as sky diving and motorcycling. Are you in favour of them? Use examples to support your opinion.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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