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Comparing the last century to this one, it is prominent that the environment has become dramatically contaminated

Comparing the last century to this one, it is prominent that the environment has become dramatically contaminated 2b87A
Comparing the last century to this one, it is prominent that the environment has become dramatically contaminated. Also, it has already caused a negative effect on animals and plants. Therefore, this Global tragedy must be solved in the upcoming years, otherwise, this can eradicate a huge number of endemic creatures and the world will start to starve and suffer. Some believe that it is too late to take something about it. Others and me are definitely sure, that there is still time to take actions to prevent this problem. This essay will examine my opinion and will give some shreds of evidence. On one hand, people’s activities have caused enormous effects on the nature. Consequently, citizens started to think about this issue. Furthermore, some scientists have already analyzed the whole world situation and shared their ideas. During the next 40 years, the population will tremendously grow and their demands for oil and gas will increase. Hence, people should try to make an ecological clear way to create an energy. Fortunately, they already exist. People can get renewable electricity from sun, water and wind. For instance, more than a half of the energy in France is being produced from solar and wind power stations. Accordingly, this kind of energy is very cheap and environmentally friendly which makes it popular among people. On the other hand, some campaigns have already obtained magnificent results. For example, there are already exist factories that recycle carbon dioxide onto o2. Additionally, some countries even encourage their citizens to take care about the nature, by simply gathering wastes and converting them into great materials. Thus, one can say, that by building these kinds of edifices, people can even eradicate this problem. In conclusion, human activities are still considered to be the most harmful. They have a negative effect on various creatures and plants. Hereby, people need to be fascinated into solving this problem and never think that there were left no time to do something about it.
Comparing the last century to this one, it is prominent that the environment has become
dramatically
contaminated.
Also
, it has
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
already
caused a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect on animals and plants.
Therefore
, this Global tragedy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be solved
in the upcoming years,
otherwise
, this can eradicate a huge number of endemic creatures and the world will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to starve and suffer.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
believe that it is too late to take something about it. Others and
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me
are definitely sure, that there is
still
time to take actions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
this problem. This essay will examine my opinion and will give
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
shreds of evidence.

On one hand,
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people’s
activities have caused enormous effects on the nature.
Consequently
, citizens
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about this issue.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
scientists have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
already
analyzed the whole world situation and shared their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
. During the
next
40 years, the population will
tremendously
grow and their demands for oil and gas will increase.
Hence
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
should try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an ecological
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
way to create an energy.
Fortunately
, they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
already
exist.
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People
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
renewable electricity from sun, water and wind.
For instance
, more than a half of the energy in France is
being produced
from solar and wind power stations.
Accordingly
, this kind of energy is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
and
environmentally
friendly which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
it popular among
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

On the other hand
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
campaigns have
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already
obtained magnificent results.
For example
, there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
already
exist factories that recycle carbon dioxide onto o2.
Additionally
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
countries even encourage their citizens to take care about the nature, by
simply
gathering wastes and converting them into great materials.
Thus
, one can say, that by building these kinds of edifices,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can even eradicate this problem.

In conclusion
, human activities are
still
considered to be the most harmful. They have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect on various creatures and plants. Hereby,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
need to
be fascinated
into solving this problem and never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that there were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
no time to do something about it.
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IELTS essay Comparing the last century to this one, it is prominent that the environment has become dramatically contaminated

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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