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Nowadays more and more people consume fast food on a regular basis. What can be the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? v.2

Nowadays more and more people consume fast food on a regular basis. What can be the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? v. 2
In this day and age, many people claim that consuming fast food on a regular basis has gained popularity. While some people accept that there are some benefits, others think that it has several drawbacks. On the one hand, there are some disadvantages of consuming fast food. The main shortcoming is that fast food contains the high content of salt, fat, and carbohydrate. It is important that people use regularly junk food makes them suffer from health problems. The most example of this are overweight, diabetes, high blood pressure, and heart-related diseases. Another drawback is that using junk food and sugary snack increase the risk of cancer in citizens, such as liver and stomach cancers. This stem from food additives, which is supplemented in processed food. Moreover, poor food hygiene is a factor contributing to increase the cancer people rate in the world. On the other hand, it seems to some people that citizens consume junk food because of some undeniable benefits. Firstly, it is important that consuming fast food makes it easier for people to prepare a meal. This is necessary for people who fail to cook. As a result, they can save time and devote more time and energy to effectively work. Another advantage could be that is an apparent fact that fast food is cheap and mouth-watering. For instance, there is the majority of 85 % Vietnamese who are surveyed think that processed food is attractive. In conclusion, there are some plus points for consuming fast food, although this decision has some notable downsides.
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claim that consuming
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on a regular basis has gained popularity. While
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accept that there are
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benefits, others
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that it has several drawbacks.

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disadvantages of consuming
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. The main shortcoming is that
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contains the high content of salt,
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fat
, and carbohydrate. It is
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people
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use
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junk
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food
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makes
them suffer from health problems. The most example of this are overweight, diabetes, high blood pressure, and heart-related diseases. Another drawback is that using junk
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food
and sugary snack increase the
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risk
of cancer in citizens, such as liver and stomach cancers. This stem from
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additives, which
is supplemented
in processed
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.
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, poor
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hygiene is a factor contributing to increase the cancer
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rate in the world.

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that citizens consume junk
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of
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undeniable benefits.
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that consuming
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it easier for
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to prepare a meal. This is necessary for
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who fail to cook.
As a result
, they can save time and devote more time and energy to
effectively
work. Another advantage could be
that is
an apparent fact that
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fast
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is
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cheap
and mouth-watering.
For instance
, there is the majority of 85 % Vietnamese who
are surveyed
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think
that processed
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is attractive.

In conclusion
, there are
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some
plus points for consuming
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fast
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, although this decision has
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some
notable downsides.
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IELTS essay Nowadays more and more people consume fast food on a regular basis. What can be the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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