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Nowadays more and more peole are relocating to cities. What are its consequences and write its solutions

Nowadays more and more peole are relocating to cities. What are its consequences and write its solutions VEOD7
Nowadays, many people have a tendency of relocating from rural areas to urban cities for broader career opportunities. This essay believes the main consequences associated with this tendency are labour shortage in the countrysides and a surplus of the workforce in larger cities and suggests lifting motivation of workers and programs aimed at raising the economy in countrysides as the most viable solutions. Firstly, two main issues regarding the relocation of the workforce are the shortage of labour in the countrysides and, consequently, the overabundance of manpower in urban areas respectively. Because of low salaries and insignificant career opportunities, many individuals look for better perspectives in larger places, since they provide better working conditions. For instance, an advertising company in a small village has lower expectations, than an advertising company in a megalopolis. There are nearly zero chances for young specialists to work as marketers, for example, hence, they either have to relocate to larger metropolises or change their occupation completely. Moreover, solutions to these worrying problems are the creation of programs to motivate people to work in rural regions, which then would provide bigger career opportunities. If the government creates a special program to excite entities into working in villages, then they will have an incentive to do so. Kazakhstani program “With diploma – to the village”, which is aimed to encourage young individuals to gain valuable experience in rural areas, is a prime example of it. The government provides young specialists with the necessary amount of money and accommodation, which, therefore, motivates them to gain experience in this area. In conclusion, the main problems with repatriating to larger municipalities are labour shortage in rural regions and surplus of manpower in cities, and these can be solved by increasing the level of motivation of young specialists and providing them with comfortable working conditions.
Nowadays,
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many
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people
have a tendency of relocating from
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rural
areas to urban cities for broader career opportunities. This essay believes the main consequences associated with this tendency are
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labour
shortage in the countrysides and a surplus of the workforce in larger cities and suggests lifting motivation of workers and
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programs
aimed at raising the economy in countrysides as the most viable solutions.

Firstly
, two main issues regarding the relocation of the workforce are the shortage of
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labour
in the countrysides and,
consequently
, the overabundance of manpower in urban areas
respectively
.
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Because
of low salaries and insignificant career opportunities,
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many
individuals look for better perspectives in larger places, since they provide better working conditions.
For instance
, an advertising
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company
in a
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small
village has lower expectations, than an advertising
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company
in a megalopolis. There are
nearly
zero chances for
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young
specialists to work as marketers,
for example
,
hence
, they either
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have to
relocate to larger metropolises or
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change
their occupation completely.

Moreover
, solutions to these worrying problems are the creation of
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programs
to motivate
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people
to work in
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rural
regions, which then would provide bigger career opportunities. If the
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government
creates a special
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program
to excite entities into working in villages, then they will have an incentive to do
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so
.
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Kazakhstani
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program
“With diploma
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–
to the village”, which
is aimed
to encourage
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young
individuals to gain valuable experience in
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rural
areas, is a prime example of it. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
provides
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
specialists with the necessary amount of money and accommodation, which,
therefore
, motivates them to gain experience in this area.

In conclusion
, the main problems with repatriating to larger municipalities are
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labour
shortage in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rural
regions and surplus of manpower in cities, and these can
be solved
by increasing the level of motivation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
specialists and providing them with comfortable working conditions.
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IELTS essay Nowadays more and more peole are relocating to cities. What are its consequences and write its solutions

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4 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
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