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Demand of fossil fuels is increasing day by day and it become necessary to look at these resources in a natural and remote areas to the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages.

Demand of fossil fuels is increasing day by day and it become necessary to look at these resources in a natural and remote areas to the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages. N8Op2
The demand of natural resources such as oil and gas has been increased from recent years, it is highly imperative to discover these natural fuels in far flung areas. Although it has many merits and demerits, the drawbacks are more because it degrades the environment of that area and at times hefty amount of money goes into vain. To begin with, there are some benefits of finding new resources in natural areas. Perhaps the most prominent planet that is that it cater to the needs of fossil fuels. In other words, it is generally seen that in modern era there is scarcity of natural resources in many reasons because of more use of such fuels. Thus, hordes of people have to face some problems regarding transportation. If researchers discover new fuse in far flung areas, people will fulfill their fundamental needs. What is more, it fortify the economy of country. To support it, if a nation discover new resources, it can be sold be sold by that nation's authorities to other regions and localities. To cite an example, a Dubai government earn around 50% of income to export petrol and diesel to another countries every year. Hence, it consolidate the economy rate of country. On the contrary side, it has many drawbacks. The first and foremost disadvantage is that it degrade the environment of distant areas because many researchers and their team members go to that area for new invention by Vikas and other mode of transportation and automobiles pump out of noxious gases and such gases are detrimental to human as well as animals health. Secondly, there are many types trees on far reaching areas some causes different type of infection and allergy because many masses are unaware about it and when they touch such trees, at times, they may have to face some skin hassles. Finally, big chunks of money may be wasted. To support it, this process is not straight forward and it requires happy amount of funding to discover new fuels. When such process fails, the whole amount of money go into vain. Consequently, it proves to be exorbitantly costly. To encapsulate, although it has both positive as well as negative points. I believe negative points have more weight as it is not safe for people and animals and it is very expensive task.
The demand of
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natural
resources such as oil and gas has
been increased
from recent years, it is
highly
imperative to
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discover
these
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natural
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fuels
in
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far flung
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areas
. Although it has
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many
merits and demerits, the drawbacks are more
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because
it degrades the environment of that
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area
and at times hefty amount of money goes into vain.

To
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begin
with, there are
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some
benefits of finding
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new
resources in
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natural
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areas
. Perhaps the most prominent planet
that is
that it cater to the needs of fossil
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fuels
.
In other words
, it is
generally
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seen
that in modern era there is scarcity of
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natural
resources in
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many
reasons
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because
of more
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use
of such
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fuels
.
Thus
, hordes of
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people
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have to
face
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some
problems regarding transportation. If researchers
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discover
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new
fuse in
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far flung
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areas
,
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people
will fulfill their fundamental needs.
What is more
, it
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fortify
the economy of country. To support it, if a nation
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discover
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new
resources, it can
be sold
be sold
by that nation's authorities to other regions and localities. To cite an example, a Dubai
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government
earn around 50% of income to export petrol and diesel to another countries every year.
Hence
, it
Did you mean "consolidates"?
consolidate
the economy rate of country.

On the contrary
side, it has
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many
drawbacks. The
first
and foremost disadvantage is that it degrade the environment of distant
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areas
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because
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many
researchers and their team members go to that
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area
for
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new
invention by Vikas and other mode of transportation and automobiles pump out of noxious gases and such gases are detrimental to human
as well
as animals health.
Secondly
, there are
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many
types trees on
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far reaching
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areas
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some
causes
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different
type of infection and allergy
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because
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many
masses are unaware about it and when they touch such trees, at times, they may
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have to
face
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some
skin hassles.
Finally
,
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big
chunks of money may
be wasted
. To support it, this process is not straight forward and it requires happy amount of funding to
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discover
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new
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fuels
. When such process fails, the whole amount of money go into vain.
Consequently
, it proves to be
exorbitantly
costly.

To encapsulate, although it has both
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positive
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as well as
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negative
points. I believe
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negative
points have more weight as it is not safe for
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people
and animals and it is
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very
expensive task.
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IELTS essay Demand of fossil fuels is increasing day by day and it become necessary to look at these resources in a natural and remote areas to the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
388 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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