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Nowadays more and more old people compared with younger people for the same jobs. What can be the reason for this? Do you think it is good for the society as a whole?

Nowadays more and more old people compared with younger people for the same jobs. What can be the reason for this? Do you think it is good for the society as a whole? Lb3rr
Accustomed persons are now sorting for those types of services which is similar to the juvenile's job pattern. This essay will discuss the main reasons for this epidemic and propose some possible solutions to avoid them. The foremost causes of no difference in tasks between old and youngers are the shortage of service category in the job sector. The works which are suitable for too aged people are not available now. This results in intending the adult people to choose juvenile's tasks which do not consist of over-aged salaries. The best solution to these problems is to extend the service category of too aged persons who can be able to do only that type of works. Firstly, the chief of the company must be aware of the old folks of service. Therefore, an effective way to make recruiters more active to opt that type of persons who are over-aged in their life. For instance, Manging director of an institution should extend the post of Senior managers so that job selectors can call interview for the old people. Moreover, the problem is accentuated by the growing number of people, who are getting jobless day by day. Hence, most accustomed cannot get shelter in their last stage and also they did not get any pension scheme. For example, poor countries of government cannot collect tax properly from their people because of corruption in their tax circle zone which would be availed for the welfare of too aged folks. Moreover, persons of the state are not conscious about repaying their return taxes. And the best way to avoid the hazards is creating privilege for the citizen of the region who might be eager to fulfil their taxes. Thus, taking the taxable money, it will be distributed to the old aged folks who can lead their life in a flexible way. To sum up, similar jobs between the young and old are declining the jobs every day. The most effective solution is to make a comfortable life leading of accustomed people.
Accustomed
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persons
are
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now
sorting for those types of
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services
which is similar to the juvenile's
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job
pattern. This essay will discuss the main reasons for this epidemic and propose
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some
possible solutions to avoid them.

The foremost causes of no difference in tasks between
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old
and
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youngers
are the shortage of
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service
category in the
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job
sector. The works which are suitable for too
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aged
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people
are not available
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now
. This results in intending the adult
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people
to choose juvenile's tasks which do not consist of over-aged salaries. The best solution to these problems is to extend the
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service
category of too
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aged
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persons
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who
can be able to do
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only
that type of works.
Firstly
, the chief of the
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company
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must
be aware of the
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old
folks of
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service
.
Therefore
, an effective way to
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make
recruiters more active to opt that type of
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persons
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who
are over-aged in their life.
For instance
,
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Manging
director of an institution should extend the post of Senior managers
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so
that
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job
selectors can call interview for the
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old
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people
.

Moreover
, the problem
is accentuated
by the growing number of
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people
,
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who
are getting jobless day by day.
Hence
, most accustomed cannot
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get
shelter in their last stage and
also
they did not
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get
any pension scheme.
For example
, poor countries of
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government
cannot collect
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tax
properly
from their
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people
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because
of corruption in their
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tax
circle zone which would
be availed
for the welfare of too
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aged
folks.
Moreover
,
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persons
of the state are not conscious about repaying their return
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taxes
. And the best way to avoid the hazards is creating privilege for the citizen of the region
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who
might be eager to fulfil their
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taxes
.
Thus
, taking the taxable money, it will
be distributed
to the
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old
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aged
folks
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who
can lead their life
Consider replacing "in a flexible way" with the adverb for "flexible"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a flexible way
.

To sum up, similar
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jobs
between the young and
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old
are declining the
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jobs
every day. The most effective solution is to
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make
a comfortable life leading of accustomed
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people
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays more and more old people compared with younger people for the same jobs. What can be the reason for this? Do you think it is good for the society as a whole?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
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