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Nowadays more and more money is being spent on special events such as weddings and birthdays. why do you think this is happing?

Nowadays more and more money is being spent on special events such as weddings and birthdays. why do you think this is happing? gADOd
In present time, Spending excessive money on special occasions and events that is increasing trend in the global. I ponder that it is not good thing to spend more money on special events. Firstly, people can invest economy in weddings for enjoying and happiness. Secondly, person who indulge economy on birth day parties and ceremony due to fact that they want to make higher social status on community. While some of them use it for getting love and express their love and care to another person.
In present time, Spending excessive money on special occasions and
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events
that is
increasing trend in the global. I ponder that it is not
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good
thing to spend more money on special
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events
.
Firstly
,
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people
can invest economy in weddings for enjoying and happiness.
Secondly
, person who indulge economy on birth day parties and ceremony due to fact that they want to
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make
higher social status on community. While
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of them
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use
it for getting
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love
and express their
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love
and care to another person.
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IELTS essay Nowadays more and more money is being spent on special events such as weddings and birthdays. why do you think this is happing?

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