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Nowadays, more and more children play computer games. Why do you think this is the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, more and more children play computer games. Why do you think this is the case? Is it a positive or negative development? AjXx3
Due to rapidly growing technology many children are playing computer games too much. They are spending too much time on computer games rather than playing outside. In my opinion this is negative trend. There are several reasons behind of this issue. To begin with, due to cheaper availability of laptops or computer many can afford to buy it. Moreover, now-a-days, parents are too much busy in their working life, hence they can not give sufficient time to there offspring. Therefore, they buy a computer for their kids. Consequently, when there are no one around them, they like to spend time on the computer. Resultant, many kids get obese and sedentary lifestyle.
Due to
rapidly
growing technology
many
children are playing computer games too much. They are spending too much time on computer games
rather
than playing outside. In my opinion this is
negative
trend. There are several reasons behind of this issue. To
begin
with, due to cheaper availability of laptops or computer
many
can afford to
buy
it.
Moreover
,
now
-a-days, parents are too much busy in their working life,
hence
they can not give sufficient time to
there
offspring.
Therefore
, they
buy
a computer for their kids.
Consequently
, when there are no one around them, they like to spend time on the computer. Resultant,
many
kids
get
obese and sedentary lifestyle.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more children play computer games. Why do you think this is the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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