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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.18

Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 18
It is argued that authorities should use the money for constructing railways and road. I would with the idea; however, I believe that both railways and roads are equally important and they bring a lot of benefit in our life. On the one hand, the government plays an essential role in developing kinds of transport, and railways are one of the transports that we need to invest it. Obviously, the railway transport is an advantage mode of transport as it is safety and unaffected by weather conditions, such as rains, storm or fog. For instance, railways are suitable for bulky and heavy goods over long distance; therefore, when people transport products, they will not impact on quality of goods due to bad weather conditions. Moreover, the cost of building railways is cheaper than other transports because almost working expenses of railways are fixed costs. On the other hand, road transport also has some usefulness. Firstly, building road transport suit exchange of transport of goods between citizens of large towns and small villages where people are not served by rail or air transport. To illustrate, the government spends money constructing roads rather than other transport for people who live in the high mountain. Furthermore, the movement of goods begins and ultimately ends by making use of roads; thus, road transport plays a vital role in feeder to the other transport, such as railways, airways and ships. In conclusion, both building railways and roads are equally important to general transports. They are flexible service in our life, and they bring a great deal of benefit aspect such as moving people and goods.
It
is argued
that authorities should
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use
the money for constructing
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railways
and
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road
. I would with the
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idea
;
however
, I believe that both
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railways
and
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roads
are
equally
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important and
they bring
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a lot of
benefit in our life.

On the one hand, the
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government
plays an essential role in developing kinds of
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transport
, and
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railways
are one of the
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transports
that we need to invest it.
Obviously
, the
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railway
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transport
is an advantage mode of
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transport
as it is safety and unaffected by weather conditions, such as rains, storm or fog.
For instance
,
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railways
are suitable for bulky and heavy
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goods
over long distance;
therefore
, when
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people
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transport
products, they will not impact on quality of
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goods
due to
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bad
weather conditions.
Moreover
, the cost of building
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railways
is cheaper than
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other
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transports
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because
almost working expenses of
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railways
are
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fixed
costs.

On the
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other
hand,
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road
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transport
also
has
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some
usefulness.
Firstly
, building
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road
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transport
suit exchange of
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transport
of
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goods
between citizens of large towns and
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small
villages where
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people
are not served by rail or air
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transport
. To illustrate, the
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government
spends money constructing
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roads
rather
than
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other
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transport
for
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people
who
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live
in the high mountain.
Furthermore
, the movement of
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goods
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begins
and
ultimately
ends by making
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use
of
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roads
;
thus
,
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road
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transport
plays a vital role in feeder to the
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other
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transport
, such as
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railways
, airways and ships.

In conclusion
, both building
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railways
and
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roads
are
equally
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important
to general
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transports
. They are flexible service in our life, and they bring a great deal of benefit aspect such as moving
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people
and
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goods
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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