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Nowadays, marketers have left no stone unturned to entice customers. Certain fast food companies and restaurants now tie up with schools to endorse their products. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Nowadays, marketers have left no stone unturned to entice customers. Certain fast food companies and restaurants now tie up with schools to endorse their products. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience YBVXN
With the advent of time human are changing a lot. They kept adding the things to their list. Lifestyle has seen a drastic change. Food is one of such changed over period. Bussiness man are using this as an oppurtunity to fill their pockets. They are using every possible stratergy to attract customers. Likewise, There are some restaurants and fast food companies are colabrating with schools to endorse their products. Even though, it a profitable to both managment of the school and food companies, I beilive that it is a negative development. Firstly, the food in the restaurants is mostly unhealthy and ingredients that are used are stored for long time. It can cause problems to body. Also, it is expensive to average family. Most of the people cannot afford it. Moreover, Fast food is majorly made up of processed food or combing them. Consuming fast food often can lead to obesity which is, one issue that people are facing. So, these foods are not encouraged in the society. It shows adverse effects when students in the school are exposed to them. THey are influenced by these companies when they are tie up with schools. Moreover, children have sensitive mind that they can be easily attracted. tThis food does not provide the suffienct nutrients to children. when students are habited to such foods they not only taking the unhealthy food but also rising the problems to the parents. They are forcing the parents to buy these items that every parent can not afford regularly. It is in the light of the fact that exposure should be avoided at first step. To conclude, Every one has freedom to market their product, but invoving schools can lead to more disadvantage than the advantages.
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adding the things to their list. Lifestyle has
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seen
a drastic
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change
.
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Food
is one of such
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changed
over period.
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Bussiness
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man
are using this as an
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oppurtunity
to fill their pockets. They are using every possible
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stratergy
to attract customers.
Likewise
, There are
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some
restaurants and
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fast
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food
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companies
are
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colabrating
with
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schools
to endorse their products.
Even though
,
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it
a profitable to both
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managment
of the
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school
and
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food
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companies
, I
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beilive
that it is a
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negative
development.

Firstly
, the
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food
in the restaurants is
mostly
unhealthy and ingredients that are
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used
are stored
for long time. It can cause problems to body.
Also
, it is expensive to average family. Most of the
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people
cannot afford it.
Moreover
,
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Fast
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food
is
majorly
made up of processed
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food
or combing them. Consuming
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fast
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food
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often
can lead to obesity which is, one issue that
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people
are facing.
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So
, these
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foods
are not encouraged in the society. It
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shows
adverse effects when students in the
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school
are exposed
to them.
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THey
are influenced
by these
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companies
when they are tie up with schools.

Moreover
, children have sensitive mind that they can be
easily
attracted.
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tThis
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food
does not provide the
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suffienct
nutrients to children.
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when
students are
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habited
to such
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foods
they not
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only
taking the unhealthy
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food
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but
also
rising the problems to the parents. They are forcing the parents to
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buy
these items that every parent can not afford
regularly
. It is in the light of the fact that exposure should
be avoided
at
first
step.

To conclude
, Every one has freedom to market their product,
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but
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invoving
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schools
can lead to more disadvantage than the advantages.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, marketers have left no stone unturned to entice customers. Certain fast food companies and restaurants now tie up with schools to endorse their products. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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