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Write about the following topic:Nowadays many young people leave home at an early age to either study or work in another city. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for young people?Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience.

: Nowadays many young people leave home at an early age to either study or work in another city. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for young people? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience. xPEK1
There is a current argument over whether a lot of young people live alone to study or work in another city. This trend to live so far that parents have both pros and cons which will be elucidated in this essay. I personally believe that leaving home for a better education or career is the right step to take. Nowadays, some people live separately, they learn how to become self- reliant and make decisions independently. For example, when those young people live with their family, most of their tasks are done by their parents. However, when they start living away, they learn how to manage their time, clean the house, do laundry, cook, pay the bills and so on. Also, they learn the value of money and try to spend it reasonably and save it for the future. Furthermore, they make new friends and learn about diverse customs and cultures. On the other hand, when those young people live alone, they need to take on many responsibilities. Initially, this leads them to feel isolated, and they often feel depressed as a result. Furthermore, they are not always mature enough to avoid the pitfalls of bad company and habits. So, if they find inappropriate friends or roommates who have bad habits, they would probably get involved in unethical acts and crimes. In conclusion, both are the advantages and drawbacks, it seems reasonable to outilin that sooner or later they will have to take up those responsibilities and it is better that they face life and its challenges at a young age. Although living alone may have some drawbacks, it leads to youth bringing up more independence which is essential for their career growth and life.
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people
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live
alone to study or work in another city. This trend to
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live
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so
far that parents have both pros and cons which will
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in this essay. I
personally
believe that leaving home for a better education or career is the right step to take.

Nowadays,
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some
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people
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live
separately
, they
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learn
how to become self- reliant and
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make
decisions
independently
.
For example
, when those
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young
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people
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live
with their family, most of their tasks
are done
by their parents.
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, when they
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start
living away, they
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learn
how to manage their time, clean the
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house
, do laundry, cook, pay the bills and
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so
on.
Also
, they
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learn
the value of money and try to spend it
reasonably
and save it for the future.
Furthermore
, they
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make
new friends and
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learn
about diverse customs and cultures.

On the other hand
, when those
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young
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people
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live
alone, they need to take on
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many
responsibilities.
Initially
, this leads them to feel isolated, and they
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often
feel depressed
as a result
.
Furthermore
, they are not always mature
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enough
to avoid the pitfalls of
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bad
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company
and habits.
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So
, if they find inappropriate friends or roommates who have
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bad
habits, they would
probably
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get
involved in unethical acts and crimes.

In conclusion
, both are the advantages and drawbacks, it seems reasonable to
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outilin
that sooner or later they will
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have to
take up those responsibilities and it is better that they face life and its challenges at a
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young
age. Although living alone may have
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some
drawbacks, it leads to youth bringing up more independence which is essential for their career growth and life.
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IELTS essay : Nowadays many young people leave home at an early age to either study or work in another city. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for young people? Support your point of view with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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284 words
6.5
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