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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. elEV
Nowadays, many people enjoy travelling to many different countries in order to reduce stress from working and environments. However, some people may believe that travelling to other countries can cause a negative impact. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement for the following reasons. Firstly, many people who love travelling may take a break to travel to other countries once they can take leave from their works or from their studies, and the main reason is that they want to reduce stress from their works and studies. Furthermore, they can catch a great opportunity to learn more things such as languages and cultures while travelling. According to statistical research, the number of Hong Kong people who are interested in travelling has recently been increased higher due to stress from works and studies. In fact, many people who come from other Asia countries such as Singapore and Korea always travel to other countries twice a year. Thus, not only travelling to other countries can help people with relaxing and feeling pleasure but also gaining more knowledge. On the other hand, some people may think that people who travel to other countries such as Singapore and America may need to understand their law and obey the rules which are set by these countries government. Therefore, some people who are not familiar with the rules will suffer from penalty if they are accused of doing illegally in these countries. For example, whoever carry drugs to Singapore will be sentenced to jail and seriously they will suffer from the death penalty like hang according to Singapore law. In other words, people who like travelling should be careful not to help strangers with carrying anything while travelling, especially permitting and leaving from immigration. Lastly, although some people like travelling, they may forget to bring enough money for travelling. Thus, they may feel troubles on purchasing from the trip. In conclusion, travelling to other countries is indeed a good idea of feeling joyful and learning more new things but personal safety and preparing enough money for travelling are essential.
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reduce
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stress
from working and environments.
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may take a break to travel to
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once they can take
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from their works or from their studies, and the main reason is that they want to
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reduce
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stress
from their works and studies.
Furthermore
, they can catch a great opportunity to learn more things such as languages and cultures while
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travelling
. According to statistical research, the number of Hong Kong
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who
are interested
in
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higher due to
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stress
from works and studies. In fact,
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people
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who
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come
from
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Asia
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countries
such as Singapore and Korea always travel to
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twice a year.
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with relaxing and feeling pleasure
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people
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such as Singapore and America may need to understand their law and obey the
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which
are set
by these
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countries
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government
.
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,
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who
are not familiar with the
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rules
will suffer from penalty if they
are accused
of doing
illegally
in these
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countries
.
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, whoever carry drugs to Singapore will
be sentenced
to jail and
seriously
they will suffer from the death penalty like hang according to Singapore law. In
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other
words,
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people
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like
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should be careful not to
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strangers with carrying anything while
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,
especially
permitting and leaving from immigration.
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, although
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like
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, they may forget to bring
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enough
money for
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travelling
.
Thus
, they may feel troubles on purchasing from the trip.

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is
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idea
of feeling joyful and learning more new things
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personal safety and preparing
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enough
money for
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travelling
are essential.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to.

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  American English
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