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Today we can see overconsumption of natural resources such as air , fresh water, and oil so on .The usage is increasing as a very dangerous pace and is already reaching critical levels. What are the reasons contributing to this ? What should be done to minimize this?

Today we can see overconsumption of natural resources such as air, fresh water, and oil so on. The usage is increasing as a very dangerous pace and is already reaching critical levels. What are the reasons contributing to this? What should be done to minimize this? Xjqq
It is said that nowadays, we can see that most of people are useing a natural resources. Such as a air, water and many more. It is a very harmfull pace of all over world and this criteiria level is high rang of a critical. Discuss the arguments further paragraph There are a several reasons for this. First of all, nowadays transport systems are very increasing. For example, when people are going to the many places who is not prefer to the public transport but they are prefer to thier own cars. That reasons oil are also use to more. People are not understanding the future. Moreover, lots of places are near to the river. For instance, somanath temple which is located near the ganga river. whenever people are going to these place they can also throw plastic bags, snacks bags in the river. This is a bed habit all person. There are several solutions for this problem. First one is a most important, when people are going to any places they can use the public transport. Moreover it is a very cheap rather than the their own wheeheclas cost. The second one is a find because when people are throw gar8that time government are also find this person. And, government come to a new rules and panelty these problems such as 1000 rupee. The last one is very important for all nations because nowadays air pollution increasing in the world. In suggest that own wehicals are service a period of a month. To conclude, All people are understanding these situations and following to a government rules. When people are break their rules community also find. All in all there are lots of new solutions in this situation.
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that nowadays, we can
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that most of
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are
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useing
a natural
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resources
. Such as
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a
air, water and
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more. It is a
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harmfull
pace of all over world and this
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criteiria
level is high rang of
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a critical
. Discuss the arguments
further
paragraph There are a several reasons for this.
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First of all
, nowadays transport systems are
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very
increasing.
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, when
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people
are going to the
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many
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places
who
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is
not
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prefer
to the public transport
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they are
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prefer
to
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thier
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own
cars. That reasons oil are
also
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use
to more.
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People
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are not understanding
the future.
Moreover
, lots of
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places
are near to the river.
For instance
,
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somanath
temple which
is located
near the
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ganga
river.
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whenever
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people
are going to these
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place
they can
also
throw plastic bags, snacks bags in the river. This is a bed habit all person. There are several solutions for this problem.
First
one is a most
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important
, when
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people
are going to any
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places
they can
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use
the public transport.
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Moreover
it is a
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very
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cheap
rather
than the their
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own
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wheeheclas
cost. The second one is a find
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because
when
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people
are throw gar8that time
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government
are
also
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find
this person. And,
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come
to a new
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and
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panelty
these problems such as 1000
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rupee
. The last one is
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important
for all nations
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because
nowadays air pollution increasing in the world. In suggest that
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own
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wehicals
are service a period of a month.
To conclude
, All
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people
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are understanding
these situations and following to a
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government
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rules
.
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When
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people
are break their
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rules
community
also
find. All in all there are lots of new solutions in this situation.
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IELTS essay Today we can see overconsumption of natural resources such as air, fresh water, and oil so on. The usage is increasing as a very dangerous pace and is already reaching critical levels. What are the reasons contributing to this? What should be done to minimize this?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
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