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Nowadays, many people receive prescriptions of medication regularly. What are the causes of this trend? What consequences can this have for a person? v.1

Nowadays, many people receive prescriptions of medication regularly. What are the causes of this trend? What consequences can this have for a person? v. 1
Many people today are likely to over take prescription drugs. The driving forces behind this issue are increased concern for a person’s health and doctors who prescribe medicine unnecessarily to earn more money. This trend, however, might lead to several detrimental effects; people may become accustomed to certain medicine and neglect the importance of a healthy diet. People take medicine more as they become interested in their health. Nowadays, people have more concern about their physical conditions and are relatively acute to medical issues compared to the past. This change in the attitude towards health is beneficial to some extent; however, it also makes people vulnerable to a misbelief that we need medicine to be healthy. Parents, for example, are usually interested in their children’s well-being and try to gather much information. This causes them to be excessively sensitive to children’s little cough and fear unlikely aliments, finally taking them to see a doctor. Doctors are also responsible for the issue as they tend to prescribe medicine too easily. Some of them take advantage of the patients’ fear and their lack of knowledge to give unnecessary medicine, thus, earning more money. Such phenomena are easily found in Korea; doctors in the country threaten people to believe their words by giving medicine and force them to come to the hospital continuously although the drugs are useless to those with mild symptoms. When it comes to the effects, over taking of medicine might have negative impact on a person’s diet. Relying on medicine too heavily can cause people to ignore the importance of balanced diet. Eating healthy foods and taking various nutrition from them is the first step to be healthy; however, some people trust medicine blindly and don’t give careful attention to their food. This can be harmful and increase the potential of several chronic diseases like eating disorders and diabetes in the long run. Resistance to a drug is another serious problem. Once people become accustomed to certain medicine, they have to take much stronger medicine to relieve a similar level of symptom. Such medicine as antibiotics, one of the well known kind of medicine causes resistance, are proven to bring down the ability of immune system and lead to several side effects like nausea. In conclusion, taking much prescription medicine is caused by people’s excessive interest in their health and some doctor’s desire to earn money. This can lead to negative effects as people might turn away from keeping healthy diet and they can be exposed to the danger of being resistant.
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are likely to over take prescription drugs. The driving forces behind this issue
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health
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who prescribe
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unnecessarily
to earn more money. This trend,
however
, might lead to several detrimental effects;
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people
may become accustomed to certain
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medicine
and neglect the importance of a
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healthy
diet.

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more
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they become interested in their
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health
. Nowadays,
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have more concern about their physical conditions and are
relatively
acute to medical issues compared to the past. This
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change
in the attitude towards
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health
is beneficial to
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misbelief
that we need
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medicine
to be
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. Parents,
for example
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usually
interested in their children’s well-being and try to gather much information. This causes them to be
excessively
sensitive to children’s
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cough and fear unlikely aliments,
finally
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too
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.
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of them take advantage of the patients’ fear and their lack of knowledge to give unnecessary
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medicine
,
thus
, earning more money. Such phenomena are
easily
found in Korea;
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doctors
in the country threaten
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people
to believe their words by giving
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medicine
and force them to
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to the hospital
continuously
although the drugs are useless to those with mild symptoms.

When it
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to the effects, over taking of
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might have
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negative
impact on a person’s diet. Relying on
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too
heavily
can cause
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people
to
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ignore
the importance of balanced diet. Eating
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healthy
foods and taking various nutrition from them is the
first
step to be
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healthy
;
however
,
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some
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people
trust
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medicine
blindly
and don’t give careful attention to their food. This can be harmful and increase the potential of several chronic diseases like eating disorders and diabetes in the long run. Resistance to a drug is another serious problem. Once
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people
become accustomed to certain
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medicine
, they
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have to
take much stronger
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medicine
to relieve a similar level of symptom. Such
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medicine
as antibiotics, one of the well known kind of
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medicine
causes resistance,
are proven
to bring down the ability of immune system and lead to several side effects like nausea.

In conclusion
, taking much prescription
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medicine
is caused
by
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people’s
excessive interest in their
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health
and
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some
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doctor’s
desire to earn money. This can lead to
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negative
effects as
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people
might turn away from keeping
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healthy
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diet and
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danger
of being resistant.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, many people receive prescriptions of medication regularly. What are the causes of this trend? What consequences can this have for a person? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
423 words
6.0
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