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Nowadays many people go for shopping in thier free time and they adopted shopping as their main hobby. According to you this trend has a negative development or a positive developments.

Nowadays many people go for shopping in thier free time and they adopted shopping as their main hobby. According to you this trend has a negative development or a positive developments. 2POEk
In today’s era shopping has become a trend, everyone is curious towards their shopping. As it is believed that people use to shop these days when they have no work to do and buying things have become hobby for masses. So according to me it is not a good thing towards which people are developing which we will discuss in upcoming paragraphs. To begin with the negative development of shopping, firstly masses buy unnecessary things which they don’t want even when they shop in their leisure time. Secondly, masses waste a big part of their income and time when they are shopping in their free time because they have no stress in their minds. Thirdly,
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are developing which we will discuss in upcoming paragraphs. To
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masses
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unnecessary things which they don’t want even when they shop in their leisure time.
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, masses waste a
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part of their income and time when they are
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people go for shopping in thier free time and they adopted shopping as their main hobby. According to you this trend has a negative development or a positive developments.

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