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Nowadays many people choose readymade foods and refuse to cook at home Why do you think it happens What are advantages and disadvantages of such choice v.1

Nowadays many people choose readymade foods and refuse to cook at home Why do you think it happens What are advantages and disadvantages of such choice v. 1
Decline in public health levels has become more evident worldwide phenomenon. Therefore, some fervent supports believe that the government should allocate national revenue on building new sports facilities whereas others advice the contrary and suggest that by adopting other measures -by making people aware about the resultant impacts of fast-food and levying taxes on Tobacco and Alcohol supposedly- a perfect health can be achieved. This essay will discuss some relevant reasons behind both views reasonably deeply. Proponents of sports centres argue that not only will these facilities enhance the potential of humanity, but also it will encourage the masses to exercise. In this modern era, where people are addicted to have a sedentary lifestyle, there this imperfect living standard fuels the unprecedented rise in lethal diseases. But these kind of gaming amenities would stimulate the interest of community into games and force them to renounce bad living habits. As a result, a host of medical conditions can be warded off. For example, an article published in an Indian newspaper showed that compared to sportsmen or women, ordinary citizens are more likely to be affected by fatal diseases, but these problems would easily have been ironed out if the government had constructed fairly attractive gaming spots before. Self-evidently, these points stand in the favour of sport facilities. Opponents of sports centres, given the benefits of sports, still take it as a subject of denunciation because interest of sports is not universal. So what should be done? There are some advantageous suggestions which should be put forward. One of them is banned on drugs and second is awareness about the affects if junk food. Firstly, enormous clear evidences proved that a lot of death cases occur in society attributed to Tobacco, smoking, and Alcohol. Therefore, if ban goes into effect, then these directives will work as an effective deterrent against drugs. Secondly, it is also true that street vendors decorate their dishes as to fuel the appetite of customers and being unwitting of physical effects fast food intake, people include it in a daily meal which lead to serious health issues and these can be worked out by making folks aware about the inherent dangers of junk food. At the end, above described alternatives can be used as viable solutions. To conclude, everyone has recognised the importance of an old adage "Health is wealth" and this essay has discussed some considerable viewpoints related to both statements. Although sports facilities improve body stamina which is an effective weapon against unhealthy substances yet other mentioned options are also useful alternatives.
Decline in public
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health
levels has become more evident worldwide phenomenon.
Therefore
,
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some
fervent supports believe that the
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government
should allocate national revenue on building new
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sports
facilities whereas others advice the contrary and suggest that by adopting other measures -by making
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people
aware about the resultant impacts of
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fast
-food and levying taxes on Tobacco and Alcohol
supposedly
- a perfect
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health
can
be achieved
. This essay will discuss
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some
relevant reasons behind both views
reasonably
deeply
.

Proponents of
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sports
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centres
argue that not
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only
will these facilities enhance the potential of humanity,
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but
also
it will encourage the masses to exercise. In this modern era, where
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people
are addicted
to have a sedentary lifestyle, there this imperfect living standard fuels the unprecedented rise in lethal diseases.
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But
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these kind
of gaming amenities would stimulate the interest of community into games and force them to renounce
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bad
living habits.
As a result
, a host of medical conditions can
be warded
off.
For example
, an article published in an Indian newspaper
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showed
that compared to sportsmen or women, ordinary citizens are more likely to be
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affected
by fatal diseases,
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but
these problems would
easily
have
been ironed
out if the
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government
had constructed
fairly
attractive gaming spots
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before
. Self-
evidently
, these points stand in the
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favour
of
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sport
facilities.

Opponents of
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sports
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centres
,
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given
the benefits of
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sports
,
still
take it as a subject of denunciation
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because
interest of
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sports
is not universal.
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So
what should
be done
? There are
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some
advantageous suggestions which should
be put
forward. One of them
is banned
on drugs and second is awareness about the affects if junk food.
Firstly
, enormous
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clear
evidences proved that
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a lot of
death cases occur in society attributed to Tobacco, smoking, and Alcohol.
Therefore
, if ban goes into effect, then these directives will work as an effective deterrent against drugs.
Secondly
, it is
also
true that street vendors decorate their dishes as to fuel the appetite of customers and being unwitting of physical effects
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fast
food intake,
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people
include it in a daily meal which lead to serious
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health
issues and these can
be worked
out by making folks aware about the inherent
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dangers
of junk food. At the
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end
, above
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described
alternatives can be
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used
as viable solutions.

To conclude
, everyone has
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recognised
the importance of an
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old
adage
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Health is wealth
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and this essay has discussed
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some
considerable viewpoints related to both statements. Although
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sports
facilities
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improve
body stamina which is an effective weapon against unhealthy substances
yet
other mentioned options are
also
useful alternatives.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people choose readymade foods and refuse to cook at home Why do you think it happens What are advantages and disadvantages of such choice v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
426 words
7
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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