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Nowadays many jobs are more stressful and the working day is longer. What are the reasons for this? What can employers do to help employees? v.1

Nowadays many jobs are more stressful and the working day is longer. What are the reasons for this? What can employers do to help employees? v. 1
The ever increasing job competition, the pressure of constant deadlines, the technological dependency in jobs and people’s expectation to thrive in the workplace have changed the definition of professional life and most of the employees require to work harder and for long hours each day. In this essay, I will examine the reasons behind this work pressure and lengthy working hours and suggest some ways that the employers can help improve the condition. High competition in the job market is one of the reasons why jobs have become such stressful these days. Employers always have options for finding new employees and replace someone and this is why someone who has already been hired has to work hard to save his job. This naturally has negative psychological effects on employees. Employees have to work for longer hours to meet their performance target as the invisible threat of firing is there. Increasing competition caused by globalisation is another reason to make the workplace such stressful. Many small and medium business entities need to compete with other multinational companies and companies in developing nations where labour price is cheaper. The effect of this on employees is that they know they may be made redundant if the business they work for fails. This force the employees not only to work longer hours but also suffer from work-related stress and uncertainty. In most of the organisations, the employers these days set targets for the employees and most of the targets are hard to achieve. As a result, employees are forced to work beyond 10 hours per day and even on days-off. Finally, people’s expectation from the offices have reached to a higher position and people are ready to sacrifice their personal life for the sake of promotions. This shift of mind setup has also attributed to the increasing work pressure. Despite the higher competition in business, employers should ensure a healthy working environment and support their workers morally and financially in order to sustain in the long run. An organisation cannot survive without experiences and dedicated employees and constant fear of uncertainty cannot ensure a healthy workplace. Employers should encourage employees to work the regular hours and work overtime only when it is absolutely necessary. The employers should also encourage people who perform better and award them for their performance. The workers should be allowed to take breaks and should not suffer from anxiety of losing jobs. Finally, the employers should have a friendly relationship with the workers and have meetings to listen to their problem. If the employer can assure the employees that they are ready to help each other and their jobs are secured, they can then expect better outputs from the employees. In conclusion, higher competition in the job market, globalisation and people’s aim to reach higher are the main reasons for stress in the workplace and the employers have a lot to contribute to improving this situation. A healthy workplace is very crucial for the best performance by the employees.
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competition
, the pressure of constant deadlines, the technological dependency in
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and
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people’s
expectation to thrive in the
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workplace
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changed
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employees
require to
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harder and for long
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each day. In this essay, I will examine the
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reasons
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pressure and lengthy working
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have become such stressful these days.
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always have options for finding new
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and replace someone and this is why someone who has already
been hired
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psychological effects on
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their performance target as the invisible threat of firing is there. Increasing
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competition
caused by
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globalisation
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such stressful.
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companies
and
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companies
in developing nations where
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labour
price is cheaper. The effect of this on
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employees
is that they know they may
be made
redundant if the business they
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work
for fails. This force the
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employees
not
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only
to
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longer
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also
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stress
and uncertainty. In most of the
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organisations
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employers
these days set targets for the
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employees
and most of the targets are
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hard
to achieve.
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are forced
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beyond 10
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per day and even on days-off.
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,
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people’s
expectation from the offices have reached to a higher position and
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people
are ready to sacrifice their personal life for the sake of promotions. This shift of mind setup has
also
attributed to the increasing
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work
pressure.

Despite the higher
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competition
in business,
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employers
should ensure a healthy working environment and support their workers
morally
and
financially
in order to sustain in the long run. An
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organisation
cannot survive without experiences and dedicated
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employees
and constant fear of uncertainty cannot ensure a healthy
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workplace
.
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should encourage
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to
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work
the regular
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hours
and
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overtime
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when it is
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should
also
encourage
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people
who perform better and award them for their performance. The workers should be
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allowed
to take breaks and should not suffer from anxiety of losing
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jobs
.
Finally
, the
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employers
should have a friendly relationship with the workers and have meetings to listen to their problem. If the
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employer
can assure the
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employees
that they are ready to
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help
each other and their
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jobs
are secured
, they can then
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expect
better outputs from the employees.

In conclusion
, higher
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competition
in the
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job
market,
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globalisation
and
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people’s
aim to reach higher are the main
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reasons
for
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stress
in the
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workplace
and the
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employers
have a lot to contribute to improving this situation. A healthy
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workplace
is
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very
crucial for the best performance by the
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employees
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many jobs are more stressful and the working day is longer. What are the reasons for this? What can employers do to help employees? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
499 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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