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Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe, other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is irrefutable that both parents are working nowadays, and as a result children have to be It is irrefutable that both parents are working nowadays, and as a result children have to be raised by either child-care centers or grandparents. This essay intends to compare both options. I, however, believe that day-care centers are better than grandparents for the pre-school years of children. To begin with, most parents choose to leave their children with grandparents for ‘positive’ reasons, such as the ‘caring environment’ rather than simply because they can’t afford formal childcare. Looking after the grandchildren also keeps the grandparents energetic and vibrant. Grandparents bathe, feed and even read books to the child. This leads to a sort of symbiotic relation in which both grandparents and grandchildren are benefited. In other words we can say that it is a win-win situation for both. Grandparents don’t suffer from loneliness and depression, which is very common at that age and children are also well looked after. Day-care centres, on the other hand, have an edge over care given by grandparents in many ways. A study found that grandparents may struggle to provide the educational and social experiences infants need. Children looked after by grandparents at the age of nine months were considered to be less sociable with other children at age three than those who had been in a child-care centre. Moreover, grandparents can make terrible child-care providers if they’re in poor health and feel forced to provide childcare to their grandchildren because their children seem to have few other options. In such cases, the results can be nothing short of disastrous. Early childcare is a challenge, which may be simply too much for some grandparents to cope with, at this point in their lives. To sum up, although grand parental care is good in many ways for grandchildren, the advantages of day-care centers are more than those brought about by grandparents.
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centers or
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, believe that day-care centers are better than
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grandparents
for the
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with, most parents choose to
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positive
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they can’t afford formal childcare. Looking after the grandchildren
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keeps
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energetic and vibrant.
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bathe, feed and even read books to the child. This leads to a sort of symbiotic relation in which both
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grandparents
and grandchildren
are benefited
. In
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other
words we can say that it is a win-win situation for both.
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Grandparents
don’t suffer from loneliness and depression, which is
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very
common at that age and
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are
also
well looked after.

Day-care
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hand, have an edge over care
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ways. A study found that
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grandparents
may struggle to provide the educational and social experiences infants need.
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Children
looked after by
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grandparents
at the age of nine months
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children
at age three than those who had been in a
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can
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providers if they’re in poor health and feel forced to provide childcare to their grandchildren
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because
their
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seem to have few
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options. In such cases, the results can be nothing short of disastrous. Early childcare is a challenge, which may be
simply
too much for
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some
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grandparents
to cope with, at this point in their
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To sum up, although grand parental care is
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ways for grandchildren, the advantages of day-care centers are more than those brought about by
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grandparents
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IELTS essay Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe, other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care.

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