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Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. v.1

Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. v. 1
There are many ways in which people normally pay for products and services. Visa and MasterCard are known as famous international credit card companies. Using a credit card is a very popular alternative for teenagers to purchase products. Some parents may not allow their children to use credit cards because of high-interest rates. However, there are clear justifications for why adolescents should have credit cards. The initial advantage of having credit cards is that they are very convenient. Teenagers can buy products and pay money later. They do not have to bring a lot of money because credit cards have the same function as cash. Credit cards are also convenient to use for buying goods on the internet. Furthermore, credit cards are very portable because they are small enough to keep them in a pocket. An additional favorable aspect is that credit cards provide many promotions. Teenagers can use their credit cards to receive many discounts, and they can collect their points to exchange products or more discount. Furthermore, if teenagers apply for an exclusive credit card version, they can receive special promotions. For example, they can have a special parking space when they go to the shopping mall. Perhaps the most beneficial aspect is that teenagers can improve their responsibility. To clarify, teenagers are mature enough to open bank accounts and credit cards. Therefore, they can have opportunities to learn about how to manage their time properly to pay for bills. If they cannot pay them on time, they might pay high-interest rates. Furthermore, they need to consider carefully before purchasing products because they might create stress from debt. To sum up, there are key rationales for why teenagers should have credit cards. Adolescents can receive convenience and many special promotions. Also, they can improve their responsibility. Because of the aforementioned advantages, teenagers are likely to choose credit cards instead of cash in the future. As a suggestion, adolescents should compare the interest of credit cards before applying them.
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many
ways in which
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people
normally
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pay
for
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products
and services. Visa and MasterCard
are known
as
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famous
international
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credit
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card
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companies
. Using a
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credit
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card
is a
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very
popular alternative for
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teenagers
to
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purchase
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products
.
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Some
parents may not
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allow
their children to
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use
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credit
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cards
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because
of high-interest rates.
However
, there are
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clear
justifications for why adolescents should have
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credit
cards.

The initial advantage of having
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credit
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cards
is that they are
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very
convenient.
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can
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buy
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products
and
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pay
money later. They do not
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have to
bring
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a lot of
money
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because
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credit
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cards
have the same function as cash.
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Credit
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cards
are
also
convenient to
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use
for buying
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goods
on the internet.
Furthermore
,
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credit
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cards
are
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very
portable
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because
they are
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small
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enough
to
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keep
them in a pocket.

An additional favorable aspect is that
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credit
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cards
provide
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many
promotions.
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can
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use
their
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credit
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cards
to receive
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many
discounts, and they can collect their points to exchange
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products
or more discount.
Furthermore
, if
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teenagers
apply for an exclusive
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credit
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card
version, they can receive special promotions.
For example
, they can have a special parking space when they go to the shopping mall.

Perhaps the most beneficial aspect is that
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teenagers
can
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improve
their responsibility. To clarify,
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teenagers
are mature
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enough
to open bank accounts and
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credit
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cards
.
Therefore
, they can have opportunities to learn about how to manage their time
properly
to
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pay
for bills. If they cannot
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pay
them on time, they might
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pay
high-interest rates.
Furthermore
, they need to consider
carefully
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before
purchasing
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products
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because
they might create
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stress
from debt.

To sum up, there are key rationales for why
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teenagers
should have
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credit
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cards
. Adolescents can receive convenience and
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many
special promotions.
Also
, they can
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improve
their responsibility.
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Because
of the aforementioned advantages,
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teenagers
are likely to choose
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credit
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cards
instead
of cash in the future. As a suggestion, adolescents should compare the interest of
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credit
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cards
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before
applying them.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
330 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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