Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Nowadays ，it is easier and more affordable for people to visit other countries，is it a positive or negative development？

Nowadays ，it is easier and more affordable for people to visit other countries，is it a positive or negative development？ NWLkj
By the developing of global economic and the income of people, it is convenience for people to afford their bill for a travel to abroad. To my point of view, there are both obtain positive and negative development. On the one hand, it's helpful for increasing the culture communicate between two different country，especially for the “City In Vogue”，the developing of travel industry will enhance the local economic，besides people can explore their insight and open mind their perspective through travel to another country. Although many of people would make the “travel the world” to their deam wishlist which inspire them to work harder to build up their financial circumstance. On the other hand，visiting other county also costs a large of money，it's common to see a lot of young people falling into the consumerist trap by a lot of travel expenses. Futhermore, traveling also contain some risks such as they may be stolen, lose their belongings, encounter life danger, etc. For some city expecially famous for scenic spots and historical sites，it easily being destroyed by some travelers and the original environment will be disrupted. Nowadays ，The epidemic is not over in the world，going abroad will increase the risk of disease transmission. Overall，every coin has two sides，moving to another country also has positive and negative effects，The ease of payment does allow us to move to another country, but the implications are complex.
By the developing of global economic and the income of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, it is convenience for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to afford their bill for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
to abroad. To my point of view, there are both obtain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
development.

On the one hand, it's helpful for increasing the culture communicate between two
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
country，
especially
for the “City In Vogue”
Possible spelling mistake found.
，the
developing of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
industry will enhance the local economic，
besides
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can explore their insight and open mind their perspective through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
to another country.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
“travel
the world” to their
Possible spelling mistake found.
deam
wishlist which inspire them to work harder to build up their financial circumstance.

On the other
The character '，' is not a standard comma, although it can look like a comma. Use "hand, visiting".
hand，visiting
other county
also
costs a large of
The character '，' is not a standard comma, although it can look like a comma. Use "money, it".
money，it
's common to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
young
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
falling into the consumerist trap by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
expenses.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Futhermore
, traveling
also
contain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
such as they may
be stolen
, lose their belongings, encounter life
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
, etc. For
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
city
Possible spelling mistake found.
expecially
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
for scenic spots and historical
The character '，' is not a standard comma, although it can look like a comma. Use "sites, it".
sites，it
easily
being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
travelers and the original environment will
be disrupted
. Nowadays
Possible spelling mistake found.
，The
epidemic is not over in the
The character '，' is not a standard comma, although it can look like a comma. Use "world, going".
world，going
abroad will increase the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of disease transmission.

The character '，' is not a standard comma, although it can look like a comma. Use "Overall, every".
Overall，every
coin has two
The character '，' is not a standard comma, although it can look like a comma. Use "sides, moving".
sides，moving
to another country
also
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
The character '，' is not a standard comma, although it can look like a comma. Use "effects, The".
effects，The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
of payment does
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to another country,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the implications are complex.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Nowadays ，it is easier and more affordable for people to visit other countries，is it a positive or negative development？

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
229 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Nowadays ，it is easier and more affordable for people to visit other countries，is it a positive or negative development？