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Nowadays international tourism is the biggest industry worldwide. Unfortunately, sometimes it creates tension between people from different cultures, instead of better understanding. Why do you think it is happening and how can it be improved? v.3

Nowadays international tourism is the biggest industry worldwide. Unfortunately, sometimes it creates tension between people from different cultures, instead of better understanding. Why do you think it is happening and how can it be improved? v. 3
Currently, the travel sector is considered as substantial for universal traveller in the entire world, there are a few factors which raises concerns among other nationalities and people rather than proper communication. I believe that there are a few points for this dificulty, while there are solutions as well to handle this situation. Firstly, why conflicts are raised due to international journey? Mainly, I believe that while travelling to any foreign country, there will be a gap in both tourists and locals. In other words, many visitors do not follow the local instructions and rules provided by that nation. For Example, some countries like Dubai and UAE strictly adhere their customs and traditions and will expect the same from foreigners such as dress code especially for women. Secondly, the majority of people who visits Europe countries have issues with language barriers and obey their cultures and lifestyle. As shown as, Germany natives always speak in german language with visitors, which intern raises a huge tension among them. To tackle above concerns each government should take inititatives. First, tourist host should provide international awareness programs to locals like ethics and way of life. Moreover, travellers should follow all that instructions and traditions. For Instance, while visiting to any country they can have enriching experience and also they can know inside out about that place. Next, local ministry should take responsibility and provide a friendly environment to visiting masses. Hence, they can improve their revenue and social economic growth by tourism. In fact, Thailand offers healthy culture to holidaymakers and boost their financial status. Henceforth, there are some major issues during global visits and creates a tension for many individual across the globe. While, a couple of solutions also provided to face this kind of challenges while travelling worldwide.
Currently
, the travel sector
is considered
as substantial for universal
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traveller
in the entire world, there are a few factors which raises concerns among other nationalities and
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people
rather
than proper communication. I believe that there are a few points for this
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dificulty
, while there are solutions
as well
to handle this situation.

Firstly
, why conflicts
are raised
due to international journey?
Mainly
, I believe that while travelling to any foreign
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country
, there will be a gap in both tourists and
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locals
.
In other words
,
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many
visitors do not follow the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
instructions and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
provided by that nation.
For Example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
like Dubai and UAE
strictly
adhere their customs and traditions and will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
the same from foreigners such as dress code
especially
for women.
Secondly
, the majority of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who visits Europe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
have issues with language barriers and obey their cultures and lifestyle. As shown as, Germany natives always speak in
Possible spelling mistake found.
german
language with visitors, which intern raises a huge tension among them.

To tackle above concerns each
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should take
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inititatives
.
First
, tourist host should provide international awareness programs to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
locals
like ethics and way of life.
Moreover
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
travellers
should follow all that instructions and traditions.
For Instance
, while visiting to any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
they can have enriching experience and
also
they can know inside out about that place.
Next
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
ministry should take responsibility and provide a friendly environment to visiting masses.
Hence
, they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their revenue and social economic growth by tourism. In fact, Thailand offers healthy culture to holidaymakers and boost their financial status.

Henceforth, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
major issues during global visits and creates a tension for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
individual across the globe. While, a couple of solutions
also
provided to face this kind of challenges while travelling worldwide.
19Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays international tourism is the biggest industry worldwide. Unfortunately, sometimes it creates tension between people from different cultures, instead of better understanding. Why do you think it is happening and how can it be improved? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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