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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. What extent do you agree or disagree? v.17

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. What extent v. 17
These days, travel business is one of the biggest profession in the world. However, sadly, it creates differences between different cultured people rather than friendliness. I completely agree with this opinion. To begin with the reasons why international tourisum should be welcomed at the high level. One of the crucial factor is that it improves the economy of host country and increase popularity of the location among the world. In other words, people who visit different countries they tend to spend huge money on different things, such as accomodation, food, clothes and travel, which eventually, attract big money into the country. Moreover, visitors used to share their experience and pictures with their friends and relative which increase the awareness of the local culture. Nevertheless, there are several issues which causing tension between different country’s people in the international tourisum business. One of the vital point is the language difference. To simlify this, the foreigners feel scared because of difficulty in understanding the local languageand falling into the wrong hand. For example, in a recent police case of Delhi, a visitor of germany was been kidnapped, raped and murded due to lack of understanding the local language. Another factor is the lack of local information. Although map is available for the visiting location, it is hard to recognise the level of risk for that particular place from the map. Result of this, people sometime feel hard to be familiar with the visiting place. Thus, visitors usually spend a huge amount of time to recognise the way they have arrived. In conclusion, while there are a number of benefits from the international tourisum, such as country’s financial improvement and popularity, the factors, such as a language barrier and lack of information, create tension between various culture’s people. Therefore, it should be solved by implementing strict rules for foreigners and the new technology, such as website and local map with detail information.
These days, travel business is one of the biggest profession in the world.
However
,
sadly
, it creates differences between
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different
cultured
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people
rather
than friendliness. I completely
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agree
with this opinion.

To
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begin
with the reasons why international
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tourisum
should
be welcomed
at the high level. One of the crucial factor is that it
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improves
the economy of host
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country
and increase popularity of the location among the world.
In other words
,
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people
who visit
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different
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countries
they tend to spend huge money on
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different
things, such as
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accomodation
, food, clothes and travel, which
eventually
, attract
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big
money into the
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country
.
Moreover
, visitors
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used
to share their experience and pictures with their friends and relative which increase the awareness of the
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local
culture.

Nevertheless
, there are several issues which causing tension between
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different
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country’s
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people
in the international
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tourisum
business. One of the vital point is the language difference. To
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simlify
this, the foreigners feel scared
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because
of difficulty in understanding the
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local
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languageand
falling into the
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wrong
hand.
For example
, in a recent police case of Delhi, a visitor of
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germany
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was been
kidnapped, raped and
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murded
due to lack of understanding the
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local
language. Another factor is the lack of
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local
information. Although map is available for the visiting location, it is
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hard
to
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recognise
the level of
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risk
for that particular place from the map. Result of this,
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people
sometime feel
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hard
to be familiar with the visiting place.
Thus
, visitors
usually
spend a huge amount of time to
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recognise
the way they have arrived.

In conclusion
, while there are a number of benefits from the international
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tourisum
, such as
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country’s
financial improvement and popularity, the factors, such as a language barrier and lack of information, create tension between various culture’s
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people
.
Therefore
, it should
be solved
by implementing strict
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rules
for foreigners and the new technology, such as website and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
map with detail information.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. What extent v. 17

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