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In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. v.7

In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 7
It is now fairly common to exclude the maturity of a job applicant from an application form so that the selection of a candidate is not based on this criteria. I view this as a positive development. There are certain reasons that an employer may feel this is not a step in the right direction. The main one is that they may feel they need to know somebody`s age because the job is not suitable for an older inhabitant. This, for example, could be because they think there is a need to be very physically fit, such as work within the construction industry where heavy lifting is needed or other work where someone is expected to be very active all day. However, as a general rule it is better if rejection on the basis of age is not permitted. Although some jobs do need younger people, many employers will simply reject a candidate unfairly. For instance, they may simply be concerned about the image of the company and think a younger individual will fit the face of the company better even though an older employee may be just as capable of carrying out the role. Another reason is that older people have things to offer employers that younger people may not be able to. If it is a job within a particular field, such as law or accountancy, then the experienced one will have many skills in this area through working on it for so long. In addition to this, they will also bring a wealth of life experiences that a younger individual may not have, which is also beneficial to any role. All in all, it is therefore, a positive development if employers cannot reject someone because of their age. Hopefully, more countries will adopt this rule so older people have equal opportunities everywhere.
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common to exclude the maturity of a
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applicant from an application form
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that the selection of a candidate is not based on
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criteria. I view this as a
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positive
development.

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employer
may feel this is not a step in the right direction. The main one is that they may feel they need to know
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is not suitable for an
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older
inhabitant. This,
for example
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they
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physically
fit, such as work within the construction industry where heavy lifting
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or other work where someone is
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to be
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very
active all day.

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it is better if rejection on the basis of age is not permitted. Although
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some
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jobs
do need
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younger
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people
,
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employers
will
simply
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younger
individual will fit the face of the
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better
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older
employee may be
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as capable of carrying out the role.

Another reason is that
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older
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people
have things to offer
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employers
that
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younger
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people
may not be able to. If it is a
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job
within a particular field, such as law or accountancy, then the experienced one will have
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many
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skills
in this area through working on it for
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so
long.
In addition
to this, they will
also
bring a wealth of life experiences that a
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younger
individual may not have, which is
also
beneficial to any role.

All in all, it is
therefore
, a
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positive
development if
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employers
cannot reject someone
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because
of their age.
Hopefully
, more countries will adopt this
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rule
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so
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older
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people
have equal opportunities everywhere.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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