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Nowadays in some countries, Children are giving fewer responsibilities as compared to past Some people think it's a positive development while others are saying it's a negative development. Discuss both the views along with your point of view.

Nowadays in some countries, Children are giving fewer responsibilities as compared to past Some people think it's a positive development while others are saying it's a negative development. mX1yn
Children are backbone of any nation, however, in this present era, the responsibilities on youngsters are very less as compared to past. There are various merits and drawbacks which will be critiqued in subsequent paragraphs along with my perception Commencing with the benefits of fewer obligations on youth, First and foremost, As everyone knows In today's era there are lot of competition among the youngsters as compared to past in the fl of education, sports and other activities as if they will have less responsibilities then they will be more focused and able to make their future bright without feeling of any burden and pressure of family, hence, children will be more efficient towards their goal and ambitions. For example, a research carried out by Howard university in 2018 that revealed, the students who had less family responsibilities and issues were more efficient as compared to others. As every coin has two sides, it has dark side too. Primarily, since children can play crucial role in their family as if they will not involve in families issues, matters then they will become materialistic and self-employed only which have negative impact on their relationship with family members. Not only this, young generation can indulge in lousy companies, in which there are chances of unlawful activities increased. It would be reiterated, although less responsibilities give the freedom to the children to make their future bright in appropriate way but the negative influences which are associated with it cannot be neglected.
Children are backbone of any nation,
however
, in this present era,

the responsibilities on youngsters are
very
less
as
compared to past.

There are various merits and drawbacks which will
be critiqued
in

subsequent paragraphs along with my perception

Commencing with the benefits of fewer obligations on youth,
First


and foremost, As everyone knows In
today
's era there are
lot of


competition among the youngsters as compared to past in the fl

of education, sports and other activities as if they will have less

responsibilities then they will be more focused and able to
make
their

future bright without feeling of any burden and pressure of family,

hence
, children will be more efficient towards their goal and

ambitions
.
For example
,
a research
carried out by Howard
university


in 2018 that revealed, the students who had less family

responsibilities
and issues were more efficient as compared to others.

As every coin has two sides, it has dark side too.
Primarily
, since

children can play crucial role in their family as if they will not involve

in families issues, matters then they will become materialistic and

self-employed
only
which have
negative
impact on their relationship

with
family members. Not
only
this, young generation can indulge
in


lousy
companies
, in which there are chances of unlawful activities

increased.

It would
be reiterated
, although
less
responsibilities give the freedom

to the children to
make
their future bright in appropriate way
but
the

negative
influences which
are associated
with it cannot
be neglected
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays in some countries, Children are giving fewer responsibilities as compared to past Some people think it's a positive development while others are saying it's a negative development.

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