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Milk production begins with a herd of dairy cows grazing on grass and ends with dairy products being purchased by consumers

Milk production begins with a herd of dairy cows grazing on grass and ends with dairy products being purchased by consumers kxYVW

As previously stated, the initial stage in the process is cows feeding on grass in a field. Twice a day, the cows are taken from the pasture to a milking facility where they are milked by an automated milking machine. The resulting milk is kept fresh in large refrigerated storage tanks. On a daily basis, the milk is collected by a milk tanker and transported to a dairy factory where further processes are applied to it in order to create a range of products. Some of the milk is pasteurized – heat-treated to kill any harmful bacteria – while the rest is converted into other dairy products: cheese, cream, and butter. Ultimately, the finished dairy products are transported to shops and supermarkets where they may be purchased by the general public

As previously stated, the initial stage in the process is cows feeding on grass in a field. Twice a day, the cows are taken
 from the pasture to a milking facility where they are milked
 by an automated milking machine. The resulting You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
 is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 fresh in large refrigerated storage tanks. On a daily basis, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
is collected
 by a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
 tanker and transported to a dairy factory where further
 processes are applied
 to it in order to create a range of products.

If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?Some
Some of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcreambuttermilkhalf-and-half
milk
is pasteurized
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
–
 heat-treated to kill any harmful bacteria Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
–
 while the rest is converted
 into other dairy products: cheese, cream, and butter. Ultimately
, the finished dairy products are transported
 to shops and supermarkets where they may be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
purchased
 by the Consider using "public".public
general public