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Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.8

Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks between men and women. with this statement? v. 8
In order to meet the demands of today’s life, both men and women are working to raise their income in many regions across the globe. So, it is obligatory for both of them to share household chores too. I strongly agree with this statement as it would reduce the burden of females in doing home tasks and would promote the gender equality. Firstly, sharing household tasks by both males and females would maintain a balance among them. Working women have stress of jobs on them along with doing domestic chores. For instance, job of 8-5 would make a woman feel exhausted and having home responsibilities after that would make her physically and mentally ill. Therefore, it is compulsory for men to support women in managing home duties to keep a balance among them by equally sharing the duties. Secondly, females and males should divide home responsibilities to promote gender equality. It has become a stereotype from long time that women should stay at homes and take care of their families rather than working in the field. To illustrate, in Asian countries, a trend exists that men would be doing outdoor jobs, whereas women are meant to do household tasks. As a result, females would lack of exposure to the outside world and would remain dependent on men. Therefore, women should also be given equal opportunities for doing jobs and men must assist women for performing domestic duties. To conclude, it is a common trend that females are now working in the fields and offices to support families. I believe that if both genders are working for apportioning financial burden, they should be supporting to each other for keeping equilibrium in fulfilling their duties.
In order to
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meet
the demands of
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today
’s life, both
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men
and
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women
are
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working
to raise their income in
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many
regions across the globe.
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So
, it is obligatory for both of them to share household chores too. I
strongly
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agree
with this statement as it would
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reduce
the burden of
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females
in
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doing
home tasks and would promote the gender equality.

Firstly
, sharing household tasks by both males and
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females
would maintain a balance among them.
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Working
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women
have
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stress
of
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jobs
on them along with
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doing
domestic chores.
For instance
,
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job
of 8-5 would
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make
a woman feel exhausted and having home responsibilities after that would
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make
her
physically
and mentally ill.
Therefore
, it is compulsory for
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men
to support
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women
in managing home duties to
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keep
a balance among them by
equally
sharing the duties.

Secondly
,
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females
and males should divide home responsibilities to promote gender equality. It has become a stereotype from long time that
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women
should stay at
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homes
and take care of their families
rather
than
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working
in the field. To illustrate, in Asian countries, a trend exists that
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men
would be
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doing
outdoor
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jobs
, whereas
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women
are meant
to do household tasks.
As a result
,
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females
would lack of exposure to the outside world and would remain dependent on
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men
.
Therefore
,
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women
should
also
be
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given
equal opportunities for
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doing
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jobs
and
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men
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must
assist
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women
for performing domestic duties.

To conclude
, it is a common trend that
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females
are
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now
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working
in the fields and offices to support families. I believe that if both genders are
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working
for apportioning financial burden, they should be supporting to each other for keeping equilibrium in fulfilling their duties.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks between men and women. with this statement? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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